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      Amanda Jean @Chip Valecek last edited by

      @Chip-Valecek I thought the ones around Red were fine, although I might play with shape/colour of them. If it's movement you're trying to emphasise (that is reacting to several thousand volts travelling through her bones), try following the contours of her silhouette as opposed to the electricity maybe?!

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        Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @BichonBistro last edited by

        Here is my final pass and with text. What do you think about the text? How about the treatment of the text?

        final_pass.jpg


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          Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG last edited by

          or this one without the purple lines of shock

          final_pass2.jpg


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            demotlj SVS OG @Chip Valecek last edited by

            @Chip-Valecek You have a typo “lighting” where I assume you meant lightening. It looks great though.

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              BichonBistro @Chip Valecek last edited by

              @Chip-Valecek I like the one without lines of shock

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                Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @BichonBistro last edited by

                @BichonBistro i agree, i like it better without.


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                  braden H last edited by

                  I kinda wanna see her teeth. For some reason seeing skeleton bits like ribs and eye sockets but no teeth is unnerving to me 🙂

                  Wolf's not even gonna have to cook her :smiling_face_with_open_mouth_closed_eyes:

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                    Amanda Jean @Chip Valecek last edited by

                    @Chip-Valecek the second one is what I'd go with. Not so sure about the font choice myself, but I guess I'm a bit of a traditionalist and would choose a simple serif font. I also feel it's a bit too close to the edge of the frame. You have more space down in the bottom right. What do you think about getting the reader to view the picture then read the text instead of vice versa? Or even breaking the sentences up? One top left, one bottom right.

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                      eroomba last edited by

                      I like the second one, too, and I also like the idea of breaking the sentences up. I like that you can see the texture more without the shock lines and I personally think the texture is more visually interesting. Nice work!

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                      • Chip Valecek
                        Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG last edited by

                        Thank you everyone for the feed back. I updated the text and added some eyes into the tree. I meant to do that before but forgot.

                        final_pass3.jpg


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