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    October contest WIP as is tradition. Feedback always appreciated :)

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    • chrisaakins
      chrisaakins @braden H last edited by

      @Braden-Hallett This is dark for you. 🙂 So what head does Billy have now? I don't think the story of an experiment is immediately evident in the first one but it reads a little clearer/better than the second picture in terms of composition. but only marginally so. The second has more movement and I really like the way the dog is the central focus by all the conduit and gadgets leading toward the dog.

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      • Alesia Roosma
        Alesia Roosma @braden H last edited by

        @Braden-Hallett I second the second one :smiling_face_with_open_mouth_smiling_eyes: all the lines add more interest and feels more dynamic. Awesome work!! I enjoy seeing your process

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        • MichaelaH
          MichaelaH last edited by

          I like the second one better

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          • braden H
            braden H last edited by

            And here I was hoping for an easy piece this month 🙂 I think I'll be drawing a lot of cables, conduits and science knick-knackery 😃

            Thanks guys 🙂 Maybe I'll do the first one as well just for funzies!

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            • juliekitzes
              juliekitzes last edited by

              I like the look of the second one more as a composition but I appreciate the cuteness/humor of the first one more and would be inclined to pick that one.

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              • K
                Kat SVS OG last edited by

                Yeah, the second one is much more interesting. Might be fun to add some bolts of electricity. Plus, I like how you used "knick-knackery" in a sentence :smiling_face_with_open_mouth_smiling_eyes:

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                • Chip Valecek
                  Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @braden H last edited by

                  @Braden-Hallett I like the first option. I could see a ton of blood and gore in that 🙂


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                  • braden H
                    braden H last edited by

                    @Kat knick-knackery is the best term ever 🙂

                    I'm gonna do both. The first one just in ink shouldn't take me too long!

                    As you can see, Penny has her goggles and labcoat. Also the freshly redug grave, shovel and machete is also a bit clearer 🙂

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                    • Aaron_T
                      Aaron_T last edited by

                      Ha ha! Fun concepts but I really like the frankenpoodle version myself. Nice to see people going darker for October.

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                      • braden H
                        braden H last edited by

                        So... many... cables...

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                        • braden H
                          braden H @Aaron_T last edited by

                          @Aaron_T said in October contest WIP as is tradition. Feedback always appreciated 🙂:

                          frankenpoodle

                          This is now canon 🙂

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                          • TwiggyT
                            TwiggyT last edited by

                            The mad scientist girl and her frankendog look so happy that I just want to run with them. Be freeeeee!

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                            • theprairiefox
                              theprairiefox last edited by

                              @Braden-Hallett both are looking good... can't wait to see the full inks. I like the value structure in the wire one thumbnail better. But I am not sure if you have built the value structure out as much for the other one.

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                              • braden H
                                braden H @TwiggyT last edited by

                                @TwiggyT I don't know how I know how to run on two legs but it's so much fuuuuuuun!

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                                • braden H
                                  braden H @theprairiefox last edited by

                                  @theprairiefox Thanks! The value structure on the one with the crazy cabling is definitely better thought out. I'm not as worried about the first one since it's super simple. Characters on a simple background. I was more concerned with silhouette with that one 🙂

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                                  • chrisaakins
                                    chrisaakins last edited by

                                    @Braden-Hallett Oh no! I named my dog Fluffy, too. Great minds I guess.

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                                    • DarleneAnico
                                      DarleneAnico last edited by

                                      I'm actually quite a fan of your first concept and seeing the clean sketch I feel like it tells a clearer story.

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                                      • Alesia Roosma
                                        Alesia Roosma @braden H last edited by

                                        @Braden-Hallett they're both looking great!! But I have to ask on the first one, is that the top of Billy's head in the grave next to the bloody machete?? If so that is hilariously dark!

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                                        • braden H
                                          braden H @Chip Valecek last edited by

                                          @Chip-Valecek said in October contest WIP as is tradition. Feedback always appreciated 🙂:

                                          I could see a ton of blood and gore in that

                                          Maybe just a LITTLE blood and gore 😉

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                                          • braden H
                                            braden H @chrisaakins last edited by

                                            @chrisaakins Fluffy is just the perfect name 🙂

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