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    Dec 3rd Thursday WIP - Thoughts? UPDATE

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    • C
      carlenevick last edited by carlenevick

      My first time entering this 🙂 Just starting to play with values. This was one of two ideas...

      Trying to keep it simple and work on rendering it well! Would love to hear some thoughts on the overall design/concept etc. - Santa calling on a certain October holiday for a little help here 🙂

      Also thinking of adding some 'magic dust' around them consisting of red and white peppermints and candy corn... hmmmm. Thanks guys!

      SantaFlu.jpg

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      • Charlie Eve Ryan
        Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG @carlenevick last edited by Charlie Eve Ryan

        @carlenevick Hi this is a fun concept, love the witch's expression. Here is a quick draw over for some ideas on how to make it more dynamic and increase the storytelling etc. Hope it helps! Great start.
        upload-e7fabe39-849e-4cc9-8e15-602de40242a5

        Happy Creating
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          carlenevick last edited by

          Ooo great tips! Thanks so much! Can't wait to get stuck into those adjustments!

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          • Kevin Longueil
            Kevin Longueil SVS OG last edited by

            Looks good! I agree with Charlie's thoughts - also I recall Lee White mentioning that a straight broomstick might be too static - to put a little curve into it to give it life...not sure of his exact words but that was the spirit of it - might be worth giving a quick try - ..

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            • NoWayMe
              NoWayMe last edited by

              Great idea!
              Maybe try varying the sizes of Santa, the witch and the Bag to create interest. For example, I would try making the witch smaller, Santa bigger and the bag really big (almost falling of). Or, maybe Santa is the biggest shape, the bag is medium and the witch is small. Right now the three shapes are medium size.

              I can't wait to see it progress!

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                carlenevick last edited by

                Update... taken most of the previous notes into consideration and really had a great time working with that feedback - thanks again!

                Thoughts after color etc. has started to be worked with?

                SantaFluTilted2.jpg

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                • Bobby Aquitania
                  Bobby Aquitania last edited by Bobby Aquitania

                  Is it me, or does this look sexual? The expressions and position. Maybe put the bag between them, or have Santa hanging under the broom for dear life? I apologize if I'm way off... also shouldn't her legs also be green? Another angle might be to have Santa holding on to her shirt with one hand, his body flying up parallel to the broom, with the bag in his other hand.

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                  • Lydia M
                    Lydia M last edited by

                    I uhhh... thought the same thing. Looks a little naughty! They should be separated.

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                    • DanetteDraws
                      DanetteDraws last edited by

                      Definitely naughty!

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                      • Lynn Larson
                        Lynn Larson SVS OG last edited by

                        and maybe move his hands lower...or to her shoulders hehe...he's pretty much holding her boobs lol

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                        • DanetteDraws
                          DanetteDraws last edited by

                          @Lynn-Larson a little side boob! haha

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                            carlenevick last edited by

                            Oh God lol. Well, that's why I asked! I never saw any of that but now... well, just say I'm heading back to the drawing board! 😕

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                            • Bobby Aquitania
                              Bobby Aquitania @carlenevick last edited by

                              @carlenevick said:

                              Oh God lol. Well, that's why I asked! I never saw any of that but now... well, just say I'm heading back to the drawing board! 😕

                              sorry... 😞

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                                carlenevick last edited by

                                Hey, better to know now right lol?

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                                • Lynn Larson
                                  Lynn Larson SVS OG @DanetteDraws last edited by

                                  @DanetteDraws Her grin looks like she doesn't mind hehe

                                  @carlenevick Yes! Definitely better to know now! Don't feel a bit bad, us adults enjoyed it lol

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                                    carlenevick last edited by

                                    Not gonna lie, feeling pretty embarrassed that everyone got a chuckle lol... perhaps I need to work on my skills before sharing again. Thanks for all your input though.

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                                    • Bobby Aquitania
                                      Bobby Aquitania last edited by

                                      Don't get me wrong, I also felt the fear you tried to convey of him being on the broom. But too many things added up to that other depiction. " Is that a broomstick in your pants or are you just happy to see me? "

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                                      • Kevin Longueil
                                        Kevin Longueil SVS OG @carlenevick last edited by

                                        @carlenevick - Please don't stop sharing your work - we are here to learn from one another - I don't know anyone on this forum but I consider you all my friends - So I hope folks don't mind my saying there was a slight lapse of decorum with the replies - I think Bobby was very careful in how he worded the subject when he first brought it up so as to not cause embarrassment - it is hard because we do not really know each other but we are here for criticism - I think giving an honest and hard critique and saying things you are unsure of is taking a risk and I think we are here because we are willing to take those risks and we are willing to take the criticism too - but I know I don't want to discourage someone or cause embarrassment - so please keep on posting!

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                                        • MOO
                                          MOO SVS OG last edited by

                                          I love the colors and the candy corn and peppermints around them. I really like the way you rendered Santa Claus. Maybe one of them could be riding side saddle 🙂

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                                          • amberwingart
                                            amberwingart last edited by amberwingart

                                            I love this idea - so creative! Please don't feel bad - I think we've all had this happen (I know I have and I draw almost exclusively animals!). I've also had people tell me that an elk I drew with closed eyes looked "like a zombie" and many other funny things...It doesn't have anything to do with your skills - it has to do with the fact that it's hard to adjust our perception to separate what we've drawn and the intention in our heads as artists. That's why we have to use little tricks to help us see our mistakes, like holding our drawing up to a mirror, taking a picture of it with our cell phone or looking at it upside down. Only then can we start to see what's "just not right." When fellow artists get a chuckle at a foible, it's done with the greatest fellowship since we've seriously all been there. This one will just take a little tweak. I hope you'll keep posting - you've got good ideas!

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