3rd Thursday Naughty Children FINAL
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@bharris This is such a nice piece! - one thing that I would say critique wise is that the focal point is going to be in the gutter of the book - I think too that it may be a little crowded in the space between Santa and the sleigh - would it be worth looking at to move Santa's side of the composition to the left a bit? - possibly bringing the little girl that is sticking her tongue out to the left also - the other thing I was wondering is about Santa's eye - will he get an eye?.....I think not having the eye leaves the image too open to projections - if you can define Santa's attitude for us it would remove the tension I feel there - for me I want him to be good natured and twinkly eyed in his attitude...but this may not be your intent ....he may be upbraiding the children...not sure though - anyways I really like your piece and it does look good the way it is
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@Kevin-Longueil I will add an eye on Santa!Thank you! I realize now that those areas were too close, and it'd be easy to make larger if it was going into a book, but I really don't want to try to move those layers this late in the game.... laziness...
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I've brightened the colors a lot and tried to warm up the lights. I still have to go over the details and highlights to really paint and define things. Is this working alright? I'm trying not to wash things out with color (I'm a color person anyway) and have a few good focal points across the page.
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Best idea ever!!!
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All done and sent!
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Love your lighting! All of it is so wonderful
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@bharris Looks fantastic!
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@bharris Really nice work! Your concept was so clever from the start and to now see it completed with the nice cool and warms tones and lighting - really nicely done! Best of luck tonight and congrats on such a great piece!
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@Stephanie-Hider @Chip-Valecek and @Rich-Green Thank you for your comments! It was a struggle, but worth it!
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@bharris Really nice. I was super excited to see the finished image. I'm sure they will have a few suggestions for you tonight but I'm hoping your one of the winners!
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@Rob-Smith I hope they do! It was my first time using this method and I'd like to improve on it.
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@bharris I agree with the other comments - a really beautiful piece. There are so many great works entered this month but I wouldn't be surprised at all to see this one critiqued tonight!
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It was fun to watch and participate! This piece didn't get a critique, so I'd love to hear some thoughts. I already see things that could have used more time.
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@bharris I haven't watched last night's critique yet to know who won and how they stack up to yours, but I can offer some feedback
What I think you're strong in:
- concept
- composition
- line drawing/sketch (the only thing I think is "off" is Santa's face - I feel like he's missing a round cheek rather than having a flat face that immediately goes into a big nose. His eye might be too high/inset too much too.)
What I think you can work on:
- Colour
- Rendering
To expand on these... you have some nice vibrant colours in there, but mostly I think it's quite muddy. I think it's the snow in particular that's off to me - for one, it should be more white than yellow (the snow on the ground in the foreground), and in the shadows not so grey/slush-like. I think it would be helpful for you to refer to some reference imagery of snow in a nighttime scene. I also think the overall colour harmony is off - the deep red feels out of place against the blue you chose for the sky.
In terms of rendering - do you use the airbrush at all? For me, it looks a bit "mushy". I'd work on adding some nice textures and maybe using brushes with texture right in them.
Anyway, hope this helps! I think you're off to a good start though and perhaps next month you'll get a critique
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@DanetteDraws Thank you for that. I really don't like Santa's face much either... And I agree the sky color is defiantly off. This was my first time doing a night-time and snow and this particular rendering style. Thank you for your suggestions and I appreciate your feedback!
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It looks really great. I'm so impressed with your skills.
