I’m back! *update: Semi-Finished Piece critique needed :)
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@nadyart yeah I get the same feeling. It will all come together though I’m sure. I’m really interested to see what new things you’ll bring to your art.
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I think the piece is semi-finished. I'm curious to hear what you guys think
In the end, I added a blueish hue to the piece as well. This was more by accident, since I wanted to
color a layer, and the color was set to an illustration that I previously worked on. It seemed to work out!
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@nadyart love this! I would love to see the whole story illustrated in this style! Just picky little things...the L in "little" is a bit hard to read. (I notice this because my daughter has a hard to time reading odd fonts and this would be a story for her age), I wonder what cropping in the image a bit on the right side would look like...it may help pull little red more away from the dead center. Might be worth a click to see if it works better or not. Finally the two characters seem unknowing of each other at the moment...would it make more of a narrative to have the wolfs eyes looking upward as if he is secretly chasing little red? Just nit picky thoughts, but overall I love it!
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@KaraDaniel Thank you a lot for your input! The font was just something I was trying out, because I was trying to keep enough space open to place the text. It is good to know that it would be difficult to read though! I will keep this in mind when drawing the letters next time!
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Hi everyone!
Thank you again for your valuable tips and input. I have finished the piece and actually put quite another number of hours in it! I will leave it as is now and probably revisit it once I have learned some new skills again :). Overall I'm content about it!
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@nadyart Hi Nadya, I kept thinking about this piece in the days after you posted this final version. I'm sure that means I really love it and wish I had created it. This means no feedback is necessary but I wanted to tell you that I kept thinking, what if the bridge is the wolf? The wolf and the bridge echo each other because the log is curved like the wolf's body and the branches of the log look like legs, and what if he is slyly looking back at her as she crosses?
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@carolinedrawing Thanks so much! Also thanks for the suggestion! I think that would be a great idea and make for an interesting piece art wise. I'm just not sure what I'd think of this option, keeping the narrative in mind. I'd want the wolf to be able to run around freely, so I'm not sure how I'd fit this in were I to create additional illustrations from the story. But maybe I'm not understanding the idea correctly, in which case please feel free to correct me!
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@nadyart It seems to fit to me when the wolf is willing to dress as the girl's grandmother to get to his victim. The narrative is all about a character that is willing to be elaborate about tricking his victim, so I can picture him testing his abilities by playing a bridge to see if she will walk blithely across. Plus this shows that he is way ahead of her. In the original version he looks like he is trying to catch up to her.
Changing the bridge into the wolf eliminates the repetition between the log and the wolf and increases the threat of the wolf. The main thing that changes for the narrative is that the wolf is much bigger and there is water underneath. But I think that actually helps the narrative. Anyway, lovely work, Nadya.
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@carolinedrawing said in I’m back! *update: Semi-Finished Piece critique needed
:@nadyart It seems to fit to me when the wolf is willing to dress as the girl's grandmother to get to his victim. The narrative is all about a character that is willing to be elaborate about tricking his victim, so I can picture him testing his abilities by playing a bridge to see if she will walk blithely across. Plus this shows that he is way ahead of her. In the original version he looks like he is trying to catch up to her.
Changing the bridge into the wolf eliminates the repetition between the log and the wolf and increases the threat of the wolf. The main thing that changes for the narrative is that the wolf is much bigger and there is water underneath. But I think that actually helps the narrative. Anyway, lovely work, Nadya.
I love the original illustration too, but also think this is such a creative idea!
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@BichonBistro Thank you for writing that! I don't think Nadya needs to change her drawing, but I think when we see what someone else sees in our drawings we can be aware of unintended effects - in this case this idea came from the similarity of the curved log and the wolf. So rather than try my suggestion, she can simply decide whether she wants to keep that similarity or not. It probably wasn't unintentional and I doubt people see it the way I do.
I do love the idea of a wolf covered in flowers though.
