Feb Contest WIP - Almost Finished - Feedback!

[deborah Haagenson]

@neschof Thank you - Great suggestion! I'm going to do that.

[deborah Haagenson]

@carlianne The girl is looking down at the book, but I wondered the same thing. I'll play more with her eyes. Thanks!

[Judy Elizabeth Wilson]

Hi, looking good here. Sweet scene. If I could suggest something it would be to use minimal lines one the children's faces and also think about making the children's eyes larger. Nice work.

[deborah Haagenson]

I made all the suggested changes to the children's eyes and lips. I think this looks so much better - Thank You everyone!

[KaraDaniel]

@deborah-Haagenson sweet scene ️ The children's faces look much softer now. Couple things, right now it looks like mom is looking at the viewer not the book...also I can't tell if the lamp is on a table or the floor...I assume a table, so maybe adding a front to the table would make it more readable as a table?

Not sure how much more time or rendering you are planning on doing before the end of the month but I think you could take this piece even further because you have such a nice base of color, line, and layout. For example if you have time, going in and adding more light and shadow would really make things pop. Trying out different textures/patterns on the clothes, wall, and blanket could be fun to mess around with. A lovely moment captured overall.

[deborah Haagenson]

@KaraDaniel Great suggestions! How fun! I will play around with those things. I was going to add a side to the table originally, but never thought about a front - ha!

[deborah Haagenson]

Here's my most recent version with textures added to the PJ's and shadows added.

[carlianne]

I like the addition of lighting! My only thought is it might be nice for the kids to have a little smile? Even if it's just a small one. I think it'll make it feel more like a tender moment

[deborah Haagenson]

@carlianne Ok, Thanks!

[deborah Haagenson]

With smiling children.