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    Santa Hot Air Balloon DEC 3rd Thursday FINAL

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    • Lee White
      Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG last edited by Lee White

      love the concept! Not so keen on the composition. If you notice, all your important elements are at the bottom of the page. The balloon is hard to make out as well. Consider a change like this example which uses the page better...

      1449783396325-santadec2015svs3sm.jpg

      1449783396325-santadec2015svs3sm 2.jpg

      SVS Faculty Instructor
      www.leewhiteillustration.com

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      • Charlie Eve Ryan
        Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG last edited by

        Hey @Lee-White, thanks for the awesome feedback. I think you are right about having too many important elements in the bottom half and I will try to clarify the balloon and make it look more attached to the basket.

        I am a little worried about not showing enough of the balloon, I think it adds charm to the overall concept.

        I did some quick compositions below to see if I can work that in a bit.

        The top pic shows the balloon three times and I'll will still add snow fall all over.

        The bottom pic shows Mrs. Clause by the fire stitching the letters from Santa onto the balloon.

        I may be overthinking it and making it too crowded. Any thoughts?

        SantaDec2015SVS8sm.jpg

        SantaDec2015SVSMrsClaussm.jpg

        Happy Creating
        www.charlieeveryan.com

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        • Thrace
          Thrace @Charlie Eve Ryan last edited by

          @Charlie-Eve-Ryan I think you are right about the importance of seeing the balloon! I like what Lee did and the compromises you came up with! I like both of them but the second one gives us more of a story. It's going to be awesome I can't wait to see it finished!! I think it would make a great Christmas card!!

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          • Rob Smith
            Rob Smith last edited by Rob Smith

            @Charlie-Eve-Ryan What if you changed the viewing angle of Santa and the balloon slightly so there is more of a foreshortened look, ie the balloon is farther away from the camera than Santa therefor allowing the viewer to see more of the balloon. I like the bottom image you came up with as well. Just some thoughts.

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            • Charlie Eve Ryan
              Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG last edited by Charlie Eve Ryan

              Thanks @Thrace-Shirley-Mears and @Rob-Smith 😃

              @Rob-Smith: I'll definitely play with the angle too and see how it reads!

              @Thrace-Shirley-Mears My parents would love the xmas card. Thx

              Happy Creating
              www.charlieeveryan.com

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              • Chris Perry
                Chris Perry last edited by

                Like the textures in your style.

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                • Charlie Eve Ryan
                  Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG @Chris Perry last edited by

                  @Chris-Perry Hey thanks 😃

                  I've been trying different compositions, but I still think I like the Mrs. Clause and Balloon one the best so I may start painting it and see where it goes.

                  Happy Creating
                  www.charlieeveryan.com

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                  • Chris Perry
                    Chris Perry last edited by

                    Good luck. You are off to a great start.

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                    • Charlie Eve Ryan
                      Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG last edited by

                      Here is my final piece submitted this am.

                      charlieeveryansmall.jpg

                      Happy Creating
                      www.charlieeveryan.com

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                      • bharris
                        bharris last edited by

                        @Charlie-Eve-Ryan I really like this! You got the layout done well and the texture and color scheme is really wonderful!

                        www.brittanyharrisillustration.com/
                        www.instagram.com/britillustration/

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                        • Rich Green
                          Rich Green SVS OG @Charlie Eve Ryan last edited by

                          @Charlie-Eve-Ryan - I really like the way you did the layout and included both the making of the balloon and then Santa using it to make his deliveries. It's wonderful!

                          www.richgreenart.com instagram.com/richgreenart/

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                          • Charlie Eve Ryan
                            Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG @bharris last edited by

                            @bharris and @rich-green Thanks so much, it was a fun one to work on. I went thru quite a few layouts before I landed back on this one because I felt it added more to the story overall.

                            Happy Creating
                            www.charlieeveryan.com

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                            • Stephanie Hider
                              Stephanie Hider last edited by

                              I have really enjoyed all of the work this month from everyone but this is my favorite piece. It reminds me of my mother I think, so that is probably why. Love your style!

                              http://stephisdoodling.com
                              http://stephaniehider.com
                              https://www.instagram.com/stephhider/

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                              • Charlie Eve Ryan
                                Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG @Stephanie Hider last edited by

                                @Stephanie-Hider Thanks so much, tonight's crit session was great. So much amazing concepts and ideas.

                                Happy Creating
                                www.charlieeveryan.com

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