Feedback on Black and White sketches for MG/YA

[ChloeB.artistry]

This is new territory for my portfolio, I appreciate any feedback y'all have time for.
I want a few sweet illustrations that show how I'd handle b&W work. I want to show characters/emotion/and an environment.

I'm also wondering if mockups of the images on the pages of a book is helpful to upload to my site, or if I should just keep it images-only? (once I complete them)

THANKS to anyone who takes the time!

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

@ChloeB-artistry Hi! I love your illustrations. I don't see any major issues so great job! My one critique is to loose the text. Since it's not really telling the story, it's not important. My agent once advises me that clients love to envision their own text on the illustration. Instead, you can use maybe some blocks of lines in lieu of the text.

[idid]

Great job! One thing I noticed is the distance between image and text. You may want to leave more wrap-space between image and text to give people a bit "breathing-space".

I would also recommend change "lorem-ipsom .... " to real text.

One thing I am not sure myself and would like to hear opinions from more people --- is whether to put text there at all. Which is better, illustration/text or just illos on website?

[ChloeB.artistry]

@Nyrryl-Cadiz Thanks for the feedback - I'll definitely try one with lines instead of text to see how it looks!

[ChloeB.artistry]

@idid Thanks, yes, great point.

I feel like it works best if it's in a mockup-verison - like photoshoped into an open book. Just as this flat image with text like this isn't really speaking to me?

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

@ChloeB-artistry you could also use rectangles for blocks of text

[Art Dud]

I love the energy of your illustration Style. My only observations is wiThe the bench scene, her legs appear to be floating off the edge of the bench. I love the emotions conveyed.