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      A Former User @Gabby Correia last edited by

      @Gabby-Correia let him carry a other kid which he captured in the sea, this way you can establish the size in each perspective. ☝ 😬

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        Gabby Correia @Guest last edited by

        @Molambo AWESOME idea!!! Think I will steal that 😉 thank you

        https://linktr.ee/gabby_correia

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          Chris Perry 0 @Gabby Correia last edited by

          @Gabby-Correia Omit the last one. People like to see faces. I like the circular composition of the 2nd. Perhaps pushing the kids a bit away from the bottom of the page and creating the dragonfly's shadow over them. In a combination of your first and second images. Have the Dragonfly over them gives a more threatening feel.. if that is what you are going for.

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            Mara Price @Gabby Correia last edited by

            @Gabby-Correia I like A it has a nice perspective.

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            • Nyrryl  Cadiz
              Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

              i like the combination of A and B

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              • Gabby Correia
                Gabby Correia last edited by

                dragonfly sketch.jpg

                I have taken your advice and made a new sketch. I put the dragonfly closer to the children and added a normal-sized dragonfly in the foreground to help with the scale. Is it working better?

                https://linktr.ee/gabby_correia

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                  Mara Price @Gabby Correia last edited by

                  @Gabby-Correia Super cool 😊

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                    Elliot @Gabby Correia last edited by

                    @Gabby-Correia This is a great combo of the A and B thumbnails. It made me smile immediately too - the dragonfly looks friendly and playful, not menacing. And the kids' expressions are subtle but very well done.

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                    • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                      Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Gabby Correia last edited by

                      @Gabby-Correia lovely

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                        A Former User @Gabby Correia last edited by

                        @Gabby-Correia
                        nicely done. one detail you could add for some dynamic is the wings and the interaction of it to the enviroment. could be a small breeze from it or a strong one and depending on it do some ripple effect on the water, let the flowers in the background be "blown" away, same for the hair of the boys.

                        here a video about a rc heli over water to see how it could affect the water
                        https://youtu.be/A-71MNuae20

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                          Gabby Correia last edited by

                          dragonflyWIP.jpg HELP! The colors are off???

                          https://linktr.ee/gabby_correia

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                            Eric Droke @Gabby Correia last edited by

                            @Gabby-Correia, i like the colors you are using, I don't think that's the problem. There does seem to be a little bit of confusion about your light source though. You have an all white sky, which is super bright. Your dragonfly appears to be lit to match that lighting (top down, high noon lighting). But your children seem to have an ambient lighting. There's a lot of light coming UP from the water. Is the water glowing? (That's a really cool effect, by the way, but it may not be consistent with the rest of the piece.) Maybe try lighting the kids from the top to match the dragonfly and see if that helps.

                            In short, I don't think you have a color problem, but a lighting problem. Nail down your main light source and that might bring everything together for you.

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                              Gabby Correia @Eric Droke last edited by

                              Thanks @Eric-Droke ! I'm trying to make it seem like the children are in the shadow of the dragonfly so the only light they are getting is bounce light from the water. Maybe I should tone it down a bit...

                              https://linktr.ee/gabby_correia

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                                A Former User last edited by A Former User

                                or you could larger the shadow a bit up. one thing i dont like in the newest version are the wings of the dragonfly. it looks as if it falls down instead to lift up. i personally would go back to the bw version.

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                                  Eric Droke @Gabby Correia last edited by

                                  @Gabby-Correia, I totally see that now. I like the idea of the huge shadow, but I'm not sure why I totally missed the shadow in the color version. I saw it in the BW version. I think one thing that helps is how the shadow only falls on part of the one boy's face in the BW version. Makes the shadow more "readable". Rather than changing the lighting in the whole pic, maybe just light up part of that boy's face in the color version... as if the shadow is only falling on part of him. See what that does. I think that will really look good. Could possibly be a simple solution so that you keep all that interesting color work.

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                                    Gabby Correia @Eric Droke last edited by

                                    @Eric-Droke YES! I had that same idea in mind with lighting half of the one boy's face. Thank you so much for your input!

                                    https://linktr.ee/gabby_correia

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                                      Gabby Correia @Guest last edited by

                                      @Molambo definitely going to try making the shadow more readable, thank you for the feedback x

                                      https://linktr.ee/gabby_correia

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                                      • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                                        Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Gabby Correia last edited by Nyrryl Cadiz

                                        @Gabby-Correia hi! I really like how your piece is becoming. I like your colors, lighting, and the kids’ expression. However, I can see 2 major issues that you should consider:

                                        1. The Dragonfly’s wings. Dragonfly wings don’t actually bend like that when in flight. Keeping them more rigid looking is more accurate. Here’s a video on how dragonflies fly
                                          https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cJJowVxiaRU
                                          https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=m5XUdvBO_TE

                                        2. The Dragonfly’s Shadow. Seeing that your lighting is directly from the top, your shadow should be angles differently. I made a rough sketch below to show how I would go about drawing the shadows.

                                        I hope this was helpful. I’m excited to see where you’ll take this piece.

                                        CDC73614-7909-4DF4-8E11-97047294733D.jpeg

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                                          Gabby Correia @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                                          @Nyrryl-Cadiz Oh wow! Thank you very much for all your help, thought, and effort, it is very appreciated it. I will definitely take it on board!

                                          https://linktr.ee/gabby_correia

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                                            Gabby Correia last edited by

                                            Any final adjustments before I call this one finished?
                                            Thank you to everyone who helpe me out so nicely 🙂dragonflyWIP2.jpg

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