UPDATED: August Dragonfly WIP. Hoping for some feedback.
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@Carmanda You read my mind! I am working on that right now and think it reads much better. Thank you so much!
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Okay! I've been hard at work updating over the past few hours and here's the newest version!
I rearranged the mom and child, and added an element to the story to make it clearer as to what's going on.
One thing I'm debating, should I keep the sparkles on the kid's wings or no? I feel like it adds texture, but don't want it to distract from the cloud floaties.
I'm open to any and all critiques! Thanks!
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@JoshuaDages hi Josh. One thing that is distracting me is the little froggie in the corner. Is it an integral part of the story? If not, you might want to delete it. His cragged rock contrasts so much with the soft swirls it seems kind of jarring. The new composition is much stronger with the larger insects and the poofs of cloud look a lot more like training wings.
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@JoshuaDages I think the message would come across better if the mother was interacting with the baby more. Research how animals teach their young for ideas.
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@chrisaakins Good to know! Yes, I really want the frog to be part of the scene (he's the dragonfly's best friend), but can totally see what you're saying. I may try to soften him up a bit (as well as the rock) and see how it looks. If necessary, I'll take him out though. Thanks!
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@Chris-Perry-0 Thanks for the idea! I'll think about how I can maybe work that in. I wanted it to come across as the mother charging in to rescue the doomed flight, but maybe that's not fully coming across. Thanks!
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Thanks to everyone who helped me with my entry! It's now posted to the Contest thread! (final version below)
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@JoshuaDages
would i watch on the image without context i would neither know that the frog is his friend, i see mother and kid, and that she is trying to teach him fly+that the clouds help him to do so. i like the idea you have but it doesnt really get translated into the image.i would take some steps back from rendering it out to thumbnailing doing some sketches like you can see in the other threads. this saves you a bunch of time to get it right before you tackle the finish.
the frog for example could cheer for him so that you actually see they know each other and that they are friends instead of sitting there waiting to swallow one of em. the show how to teach him fly part is a bit harder but i would get away from the cloud helping things because thats hard to explain for it to make sense with just one image. would it be a comic you could build it up but for a splashpage kinda hard and out of the blue i have no idea how to do it right but maybe people here have some ideas.
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I love the way it turned out! Very sweet and the colors are just lovely.
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@ina Thank you!
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@Molambo Thanks for your feedback. I definitely plan on coming to the forum sooner rather than later with my next project. Thanks again!
