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    Dragonfly WIP- Composition feedback please

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    • Valerie Light
      Valerie Light last edited by

      Hello SVSers! First time trying the contest, and first time asking for feedback. I'm all ears.
      I'm trying to work through my 50 thumbnails, and I've wound up with 2 very different approaches to the concept. I'd love to hear which one you think has more potential, and

      Concept #1 is a giant dragonfly who is destroying a farmhouse and a henhouse with the wind from his huge wings. People fleeing, dark stormy night, etc. etc.
      Screen Shot 2020-08-17 at 9.02.12 PM.png

      Concept #2 I'm not sure if I can pull off compositionally. Might be more clear in color. The idea is that we see a sweet little dragonfly in love, and then we notice that the heart-shaped reflection in her eye is not love, it's actually a big frog who's not trying to kiss her, he's trying to eat her! (big tongue coming in from the upper right)
      Screen Shot 2020-08-17 at 9.02.33 PM.png

      With #1, I have a lot of clarifying and solving to do on dragonfly anatomy, but i'm liking the way the light is working in the chaotic landscape. With #2, I keep cracking myself up at the idea, but I'm not sure how to make it read well yet.

      What do you think?

      www.valerielightillustration.com
      www.instagram.com/valerie_light_illustration

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      • Gary Wilkinson
        Gary Wilkinson last edited by

        I like the concept of 2 but I think it would work better with a preceding image or as part of a larger piece where my other dragonflies have already fallen for the frogs trick.

        I think 1 could do with more of a story, consider why is there a giant dragonfly? why is it attacking a farmhouse? etc. Without such information the dragonfly could easily be swapped out for a giant chicken or bird or dragon and it wouldn't much of a difference to the story.... I like the composition of the piece though, so if it is something you would like to work on a suggestion would be to move the hill down and too the right a bit, you could probably frame in that area nicely by bringing in some more foreground in the bottom right. I did a quick sketch to illustrate this:

        sm2.jpg

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        • Valerie Light
          Valerie Light @Gary Wilkinson last edited by

          @Gary-Wilkinson
          Thank you so much for the feedback on topic and story, and the composition suggestions on #1. I really like your idea of moving the hill on the right more into the foreground.
          Val

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          www.instagram.com/valerie_light_illustration

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