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    • Matthew Oberdier
      Matthew Oberdier last edited by

      How can I make this book cover better? 5d7cb37e-cdf3-43be-b970-e14048da6c32-image.png

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        Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Matthew Oberdier last edited by

        @Matthew-Oberdier hi, I’m really sorry but I have very little time so I’ll keep it short and sweet.

        1. Bobo looks indiferrent. He looks like he doesn’t care he’s losing his yoyo. He even looks like he’s purposefully throwing away his yoyo. Improve his gesture and expression. Give Bobo a devastated/panicked expression. Draw Bobo leaning forward, arms stretched, trying to catch the yoyo.

        2. Green title on green background. Maybe choose another bg color to make the text pop.

        I’m excited to see where you’ll take this.

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        • Matthew Oberdier
          Matthew Oberdier @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

          @Nyrryl-Cadiz THanks for the feedback.
          What do you think about this pose?
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          • Matthew Oberdier
            Matthew Oberdier last edited by

            Pose #2
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            • Matthew Oberdier
              Matthew Oberdier last edited by

              I'm a little keen on 2 because foreshortening.

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              • Jacy13
                Jacy13 @Matthew Oberdier last edited by

                @Matthew-Oberdier I prefer the 2nd pose. It definitely feels like he's in distress over his yoyo in this one!

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                • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                  Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Matthew Oberdier last edited by

                  @Matthew-Oberdier 2 looks great

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                  • Griffin McPherson
                    Griffin McPherson last edited by

                    The first thing I notice is that it doesn’t seem like the yo yo is lost it just seems like he has dropped it. Unfortunately this would probably require a total redesign.

                    I also noticed that the background is taking up too much of the image. The background is not important and doesn’t add much here and for that reason I think the house and Bobo should be more at the center of attention. Bring them into the composition more. But this may not be necessary if you do a redesign as I mentioned before. Hope this helps

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                    • Matthew Oberdier
                      Matthew Oberdier @Griffin McPherson last edited by

                      @Griffin if the background lacks intertest, seems like the easiest thing to do would be to the add something interesting back there. Personally, I like the balance of the composition and didn't want to make a static, centered comp.

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                      • Griffin McPherson
                        Griffin McPherson last edited by

                        It’s not the the background is uninteresting it’s that’s feel like it’s competing a little bit too much with more important parts of the image. After thinking about it some more I think just removing the bird in the tree might fix this unless the bird is an important part of the story

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                        • Matthew Oberdier
                          Matthew Oberdier last edited by

                          Thank you all for the feedback. I'm pretty happy with the finish.

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