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    Slowvember/draw 50 things - Feedback needed

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    • Freya Chakour
      Freya Chakour last edited by Freya Chakour

      ![Hi everyone, this is the first time I upload a WIP here, but I really could use some fresh eyes on this. I started this work early November, but have been thinking about it a few month earlier when I first heard of the 50 things challenge on the podcast. So I thought Slowvember was a good time to work on this project.

      And it really is worth is, I have learned so much with this piece already, even if there is still a long way to go, and really EVERYTHING seems to take me ages (because I normally shy away from drawing backgrounds and objects....) but I also enjoy the feeling of development and learning so many new things.

      now to my question: I'm working on the figure right now and its like the tenth version, but I'm still not sure if the perspective and proportions are right
      Also: Are the Proportions in relation to the room and other objects convincing???

      Also if you have any other comments and feedback for me I am gald to hear it! (other objects looking strange or wrong to you? how do you like the composition

      Also, pls feel free to also give some hard feedback. I can take it πŸ™‚
      Unbenanntes_Projekt 62.jpg

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      • Freya Chakour
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        • ValD
          ValD last edited by

          Wow ! I would love to see the coloured version !!!

          FB : @valdartist / Instagram : @vald_art

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          • ReganArtFart
            ReganArtFart last edited by

            This looks great! All of the tiny details really make it really interesting to look at. I think you're heading in a great direction!

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            • Freya Chakour
              Freya Chakour @ValD last edited by

              @ValD thank you so much! I will definitely post the further process of this piece πŸ™‚

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              • Freya Chakour
                Freya Chakour @ReganArtFart last edited by

                @ReganArtFart thank you!! I always love pictures with tons of details and a lot of things go discover, so I’m definitely happy I’m trying to create one myself 😌

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                • K.Flagg
                  K.Flagg last edited by

                  This will be so amazing! Very nice line work. I can't wait to see it finished

                  K.Flagg

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                  • Griffin McPherson
                    Griffin McPherson last edited by

                    The only perspective that you might need to take another look at is the table in the foreground. I think we may be seeing a bit too much of that top of it and it should instead be thinned out a bit so it looks like it is a little bit closer to eye level. I was using the perspective of the shelf as a reference point to figure out how the table would line up. Hope that makes sense!

                    It’s a gorgeous piece. I’m excited to see the finished result

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                    • Freya Chakour
                      Freya Chakour last edited by

                      @Griffin Thank you a ton vor the feedback! I will definitely have a look at it, I think I also have some objects in that area that don't quite fit. (like fore some I made a perspective study first, but for others like the tea cup not and I think it shows a bit.) Its so good to have some fresh eyes look at it!

                      @K-Flagg thank you so much! πŸ™‚ that's super nice to hear!

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                      • MichaelaH
                        MichaelaH last edited by

                        Awesome, so many things to find...Really great work and body understanding.
                        Only one thing, is he trying to take something from the self or he did give soemthing back und now he is retracting? Because if he wants to take something out of shelf, his hand should be rotated to his right, like taking something from above. Now his hands looks like he put something back und is retracking his hand now.
                        whole illustratioan willlook so awesome...loking forward to see more.
                        PS. he has nice b...😜

                        https://www.instagram.com/michaelaheimlich/
                        https://www.heimlich-illustration.de/

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                        • Freya Chakour
                          Freya Chakour @MichaelaH last edited by

                          @MichaelaH ahh thank you so much! you are right about the hand, I want him to take something down, and it really looks more like he is putting something back at its place. so I will rework that!
                          (also.. XDD thanks I worked really hard on that, it was so hard to get all of the body shapes kind of right in his perspective)

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                          • ValD
                            ValD last edited by

                            It makes me think of Tomb raider...

                            FB : @valdartist / Instagram : @vald_art

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                            • Freya Chakour
                              Freya Chakour @ValD last edited by

                              @ValD oh really? How so? Can’t say I know much more about it than the name ^^β€˜)

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