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    • Asyas_illos
      Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

      First off it’s awesome! Now, I’m wondering if you’d move the chimney to the top level roof on the right side, it seems kinda lost right now. And letting the smoke trail up towards the right corner of the image, as well unrolling the ladder as @carolinebautista had mentioned, would add nice flow. I think a taller canvas would look nice and add to the perspective. And I too think the pink is a bit distracting ? Or maybe if there was a little more contrast between the trunk and the foliage? but I’m sure this could change as you still have rendering to do with darkening the cave and what not. The lighting will come together nicely once the cave is darker. This is a very cool concept! Can’t wait to see the finished piece.

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      • KayPotter
        KayPotter last edited by

        Love it! It’s a badass yeti house.
        My eye went right to the house. I wonder if a silhouette of someone or something at home might provide the scale you are looking for?
        Looking forward to seeing it completed.

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        • Jeremy Ross
          Jeremy Ross @frankiiij last edited by

          Hi @dafoota, super cool concept and perspective!

          The tree branch leaves on the top left keep stealing my attention, so you might want to address that somehow.

          I think it would be really cool to show some beams of light coming from the cave roof, just to show the tree getting some sun.

          Also, the cave would likely be very dark, which would make the tree look almost black from the angle of the viewer, so you might want to add some torches around the tree to introduce light source?

          Structurally, you may want to extend the right support branch because it feels like the house can easily fall over from the right. Just a thought. Finally, I would show the tree ladder dropped to guide the viewer up the tree.

          I really dig the color palette and look forward to seeing your finished piece!

          Cheers!

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          • frankiiij
            frankiiij last edited by

            @carolinebautista @Cayleen @Asyas_illos @KayPotter @Jeremy-Ross WOW! Thank you all so much. I wanted show my gratitude as I take have my 5th session. Ya'll are the best!

            Much love and God bless!

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            • frankiiij
              frankiiij last edited by frankiiij

              @carolinebautista @Cayleen @Asyas_illos @KayPotter @Jeremy-Ross ... Here is where I am at.

              It reworked the:

              • Door
              • Chimney
              • Stalagctites (C = ceiling)
              • Added Stalagmites (G = ground)
              • Darker in the cave
              • Bright pink tree foliage
              • Dropped the ladder
              • Dimmed the windows and added glass
              • Fix the perspective of the cloth

              Still pondering:

              • Extending the support (Next on my list)
              • The torches in the cave (How to do it)
              • Personal Items
              • Something to show scale
              • If it is too grim (As we seen today cute is what is popular)
              • Making it vertical more. (how to do it)

              I was thinking some bunnies (both cute and for scale) haha

              Thanks for your time and patience. I am grateful for your insights and wisdom. It means a lot to me.

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              Much love and God bless!

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              • Jeremy Ross
                Jeremy Ross @frankiiij last edited by

                Very nice updates @dafoota!

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                • frankiiij
                  frankiiij @Jeremy Ross last edited by

                  @Jeremy-Ross Thanks bud. I seen your yeti post. I'm afraid I just do not see, in my limited experience, much to critique. I thought it was quite nice. It's hard because being so new at this I can't distinguish the difference between a critique and my preference. you know? Anyways we are living the dream...so keep sketching that path.

                  Much love and God bless!

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                  • Asyas_illos
                    Asyas_illos last edited by

                    Wow this looks much more readable! I really like how you upped the contrast a little with brighter pink in the vines they really stand out now. And ladder down is way more awesome! You can also see the chimney a lot clearer now this looks great good job!

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                    • Jacy13
                      Jacy13 @frankiiij last edited by

                      @dafoota I'm loving the whole concept you've got with this tree-house! The colors are neat. I think the bunnies would be a good idea 🙂

                      I feel like the mailbox could be a little more clear. Maybe a little separation from the ladder? Or making the mailbox a bit bigger? Just a little something that caught my attention.

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                      • frankiiij
                        frankiiij last edited by frankiiij

                        @Jeremy-Ross @Jacy13 @carolinebautista @Cayleen @Asyas_illos @KayPotter Aight I think I am close to being finished.

                        I cannot figure out how to change the border. Making it taller or wider just doesn't seem to look right.

                        Anyways I truly am grateful. Thank you all!

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                        Much love and God bless!

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                        • Asyas_illos
                          Asyas_illos @frankiiij last edited by Asyas_illos

                          @dafoota I dont think you need to crop or resize it, looks fantastic, love the detail in the cave floor is it ice? Well done!

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                          • Jeremy Ross
                            Jeremy Ross @frankiiij last edited by

                            Well done @dafoota! I would submit as-is with a white titleblock on the bottom for your name and SVS forum name.

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