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    February Yeti cooking -update with 3d model

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    • Valerie Light
      Valerie Light last edited by

      this is great! I love how you're using line work to describe all these different textures and materials. I also love how the cozy, round composition tells us about the shape of the room without defining its edges. I totally think the smoke curling out the window and above the roof is readable, but I actually wonder if you need that chimney pipe up there at all?
      I think the fox does look like she's warming her feet by the fire, but maybe have one of them flexed, with the sole toward the fire?

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      www.instagram.com/valerie_light_illustration

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      • Kevin Longueil
        Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Valerie Light last edited by

        @Valerie-Light Thank you for the feedback Valerie - it is super helpful! Was not sure if the inside/outside thing was working. There are two little stoves to the Yeti's left, one with a pot and one with a tall kettle on it - there is even a scribbly hint of one in the original color sketch idea next to the oversized squirrel and blob of a chicken ... i looked up. "Himalayan stove" and found some cool images and based the design on that...my thought is to have a tiny glow from the two stoves and a bit more from the large oven in the wall..maybe it will make more sense then...main problem is i am not so good with color yet so we'll see how that goes - but if the stove pipe is distracting in a "why is that there" way maybe i should get rid of it...or maybe shorten it?.. thank you for the feedback it has given me something to think about 🙂

        Portfolio: kevinlongueil.com
        https://www.instagram.com/kevinlongueil/

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        • Valerie Light
          Valerie Light @Kevin Longueil last edited by

          @Kevin-Longueil where do you imagine the smoke from the fireplace/bread oven is venting in the house? I think that might be thing to address, too. 2 chimneys?
          The stove pipe that you have does make sense to be there, but maybe in a more developed line work. However, seeing that one stove pipe made me wonder how the other fireplace would work with a window there. Sorry if this comes off as nitpicky- not my intention at all.

          www.valerielightillustration.com
          www.instagram.com/valerie_light_illustration

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          • Kevin Longueil
            Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Valerie Light last edited by

            @Valerie-Light no that is great!..nit-picky is what i need ...in the original design i had all stove pipes joined together to the one in a sort of rickety fashion... maybe i should go back to that or get rid of one of the stoves or add the second chimney as you mention - thank you this is very helpful 🙂

            Portfolio: kevinlongueil.com
            https://www.instagram.com/kevinlongueil/

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            • Kevin Longueil
              Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Valerie Light last edited by

              @Valerie-Light I put a quick second chimney in the drawing above - does this solve the issue? - no worries if it does not - thanks again for your feedback 🙂

              Portfolio: kevinlongueil.com
              https://www.instagram.com/kevinlongueil/

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              • Valerie Light
                Valerie Light last edited by

                @Kevin-Longueil honestly i didn't realize that part needed a chimney, but I like it there because it helps establish more of the 'outside world' above the roof. I think I'm not reading the round fireplace with the bread in it correctly, though. Do you think you can sneak third chimney in to the left of the window? I can't figure out where the smoke from bread baking would go, or maybe I just don't understand how that kind of oven is built?

                www.valerielightillustration.com
                www.instagram.com/valerie_light_illustration

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                • Kevin Longueil
                  Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Valerie Light last edited by

                  @Valerie-Light ..oh That oven!... LOL - that one was tied into the other pipes also in the beginning of this drawing but got erased because the lines went right behind Yeti's hand and were distracting me.... I'll work on that - Thanks!!

                  Portfolio: kevinlongueil.com
                  https://www.instagram.com/kevinlongueil/

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                  • Kevin Longueil
                    Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Kevin Longueil last edited by

                    Increased the scale of the yeti... i think it is working better now... one disturbing thing is that the fur texture becomes pixilated and blurry when i post it here... i'm thinking i need to change the fur texture ...the longer lines in the beard area seem to translated better when i reduce the size from the 11 x 17'ish original for posting...glad i saw this now 🙂 anyways...any thought on the scale increase?

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                    Portfolio: kevinlongueil.com
                    https://www.instagram.com/kevinlongueil/

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                    • Jeremiahbrown
                      Jeremiahbrown last edited by

                      This is just excellent! You are very skilled. +3 on the scale increase! He looks much more imposing and true to the spirit of "Yeti." Can't wait to see the finished piece!

                      Jeremiah Brown
                      www.jeremiahbrownillustration.com
                      https://www.instagram.com/jeremiah.brownillustration/

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                      • Valerie Light
                        Valerie Light @Kevin Longueil last edited by

                        @Kevin-Longueil Great idea increasing the yeti's size! This piece has such an awesome flow to it.

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                        www.instagram.com/valerie_light_illustration

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                        • alicia
                          alicia @Kevin Longueil last edited by

                          @Kevin-Longueil Looking great! What a wonderful improvement!

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                            Emma Echter @Kevin Longueil last edited by

                            @Kevin-Longueil Great improvement!

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                            • Kevin Longueil
                              Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Jeremiahbrown last edited by

                              @Jeremiahbrown @Valerie-Light @alicia @Emma-Echter Thank you All so much! I really appreciate it 🙂

                              Portfolio: kevinlongueil.com
                              https://www.instagram.com/kevinlongueil/

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                              • Georgios Christopoulos
                                Georgios Christopoulos last edited by

                                @Kevin-Longueil It is awesome so far!! Cannot wait to see this finished!!

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                                • Kevin Longueil
                                  Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Georgios Christopoulos last edited by

                                  @Georgios-Christopoulos thank you!!

                                  Portfolio: kevinlongueil.com
                                  https://www.instagram.com/kevinlongueil/

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                                  • KaraDaniel
                                    KaraDaniel @Kevin Longueil last edited by

                                    @Kevin-Longueil looking great, I like him larger as well

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                                    • Melissa_Bailey
                                      Melissa_Bailey @Kevin Longueil last edited by

                                      @Kevin-Longueil The scale increase really works! Liking your composition and the story you're telling. Great job!

                                      Something you may want to consider is dialing back on the detail. This would be a stronger spot illustration and would have more impact if the background detail was reduced or even completely eliminated. (Just my opinion, though.)

                                      And you probably already have this covered, seeing how this is just a sketch, but thought I'd mention it anyway ... the realistic hands don't match the stylized and smooth lines of the rest of your yeti, and I feel that disconnect. But as I said, this is probably just the sketch and you've got it well in hand (no pun intended, haha!).

                                      Really, really looking forward to seeing the finished piece! 👍👍

                                      illustrator - author - smiley person
                                      mbaileyart.com
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                                      • Kevin Longueil
                                        Kevin Longueil SVS OG @KaraDaniel last edited by

                                        @KaraDaniel Thank you Kara!
                                        @Melissa-Bailey-0 Thank you for the feedback Melissa! You are right about the hands... they have blue fur on them now and are not as out of place i think. I'm thinking you are right about the background too. I think I will most likely keep the background though .. i have so many pieces with no background on my portfolio website that i think i need to show that i can draw an environment... so i was going to try to get this to work.
                                        One other random thing is i am going to try to make 2 more pieces with this kitchen or these characters in it somehow... I really think that is lacking in my portfolio also.. showing any kid of continuity of environment or character.... i just paused to look at your website Super Nice work!! Thank you again for the feedback!

                                        Portfolio: kevinlongueil.com
                                        https://www.instagram.com/kevinlongueil/

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                                        • Melissa_Bailey
                                          Melissa_Bailey @Kevin Longueil last edited by

                                          @Kevin-Longueil thanks so much! 😊

                                          illustrator - author - smiley person
                                          mbaileyart.com
                                          instagram.com/mbaileyart/

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                                          • Kevin Longueil
                                            Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Kevin Longueil last edited by Kevin Longueil

                                            @Kevin-Longueil I feel like there was not enough story going on... the bunny and rooster are really rough and scribbly but i think i am liking them ... i tried all kinds of animals - a goose almost made the cut - i did want a chicken or rooster in there from the start though so it was probably inevitable - my colors and rendering are all over the place and not final....still messing with the composition and story.... I increased the scale of the fox which i'm still not sure about... not sure about the crown on the fox or the cape on the rooster either..... or have i gone off the rails in general and should go back to just the yeti and the fox???? any feedback is always very appreciated - thanks for looking 🙂

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                                            Portfolio: kevinlongueil.com
                                            https://www.instagram.com/kevinlongueil/

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