Star in the water WIP

[KathrynAdebayo]

@lauraa Hi Laura, thank you so much for your advice! I really appreciate your input. I agree with what you’ve written here and I think it’s helpful to be brought back to the original intent. I’ve gotten into coloring the most recent sketch a bit and have been working on the expressions, so I’d love to know if you think the girl scooping the star looks surprised enough. I’m also going for a feeling of wonderment. Thanks again!

[KathrynAdebayo]

I started coloring this and working on the faces first. Before I get too far along, I’d love to know if there are compositional issues that anyone picks up on. Thanks so much for any advice you feel like sharing.

[LauraA]

@kathrynadebayo Yes, I do think she looks the right amount of surprised. I am wondering a little bit about the other girl (was it originally a boy?) who has her nose on the boat. She just looks a little uncomfortable to me and the nose looks slightly too adult. A draw through might be worth it on that one.

Would you be seeing a little bit of the underside of Grandma's neck? I really like her expression!

I also like the colors in the sky a lot! Of course, what's really going to make it is that glowing star!

[miranda-hoover]

@kathrynadebayo Really love this idea!

[KathrynAdebayo]

@lauraa You’re so right! I’ve changed that kid again. Hopefully she looks less awkward now. Yes, the characters themselves keep morphing, but I think that’s a fun part of digital art - easy to change!

[KathrynAdebayo]

@miranda-hoover Hi Miranda! Thanks for the comment! Your piece looks amazing this month.

[KathrynAdebayo]

[KathrynAdebayo]

Here’s some more progress. I hope the star stands out enough?

[Helen]

I love the one with the man and child - their expressions are wonderful and the composition and perspective really take you into their moment.

[KathrynAdebayo]

@helen hello! Thank you for your encouraging words. Maybe I’ll finish that one too at some point.

[KathrynAdebayo]

Here’s the progress so far… does the piece look coherent even with the different textures? Comments about any other things you see to improve are certainly welcome.

Also, on my phone this is looking darker than I thought it did while working on it - does it look too dark to you guys?

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

@kathrynadebayo Hi Katheryn! I'm not sure if this is too late now but based on your boat's perspective, the Horizon Line should be lower. I love the piece tho. I love the atmosphere.

[KathrynAdebayo]

@nyrryl-cadiz Hi Nyrryl! Thank you so much for pointing that out. I can totally see it now!

[Anita Jean]

Just to say, this has been really lovely to read and see the work coming together!
Best of luck

[KathrynAdebayo]

@anita-jean oh that’s great to hear. I love seeing other people’s works in progress. It’s amazing how art can improve when a group of minds collaborates.

[KathrynAdebayo]

@Nyrryl-Cadiz

Here’s a new version with the horizon line lower. It might still be too high though…hmm…

[KathrynAdebayo]

Ok, a little lower.

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

@kathrynadebayo looking amazing!

[mag]

@kathrynadebayo this looks so nice! ️️️

[KathrynAdebayo]

@nyrryl-cadiz @mag Thanks guys! Thank you for your help!