Developing great visual stories
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@tessaw you’ve got some good suggestions! I had thought about slipping fingers too this would allow me to change the angle of her face so we could get a clearer view of her expression. Maybe a bird is also trying to help her hold on? I’ll have to revisit that idea. Thanks for you feedback
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@crispalomino thanks!
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I finished watching the videos and I want to change what I said before about secondary stories. I think what Will Terry is saying is that the primary story is a simple depiction of the text so in your case, any painting of a growing storm would be the primary story. Your could just paint wind whipping through trees and you would have satisfied the requirement of the text. The secondary story though is what the illustrator adds that is not necessarily in the text but that creates a new narrative within that scene. Your depiction of the kids and animals affected by the storm then would be all part of the secondary story because they are not explicit in the text and it makes you want to know more about the characters, and the storm’s effects on them, as well as the storm itself. There’s nothing in the text that says anything about kids or birds or people trying to hang on to a post but you created your own story within the story given to you by the text and that secondary story deepens the storytelling, engages the reader’s imagination, and evokes more emotion.
I may be wrong but I think that’s what he was saying in which case, all of the characters, including the birds are secondary stories. Does that make sense?
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I have a duplicate canvas that I am trying other positions out for the girl but I still like this one the best so I moved onto color yes I went with my penny colors again… still working on additional foreground color scheme
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Doing some coloring today,
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So I revisited my second canvas to play with the first kid in the chain, I’d like some opinions on which version you like better
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@asyas_illos The second because I like being able to see her face.
Laurie DeMott
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@demotlj thank you for the feedback!
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I prefer the second too! I like seeing her face.
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@AngelinaKizz thank you! I be been working on it!
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Ok I’ve rearranged the face and also I think I’ve got second story. Yay! So the little birds have a purpose now being one of the girls ribbons had been whipped out by the wind the bird has caught it. Does that read well to you?
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Still playing with colors…
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The assignment didn't have to be in color, but since I will use it in Mays contest “storm” I went for it. I’m still open to feedback since it’s a ways away.
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@asyas_illos loving this. The bird’s ribbon seems to tangent with the roof, I noticed. The bit of curl in the middle is completely contained by the roof shape, if you see what I mean. My only other suggestion would be to possibly lighten the birds, or at least their faces, as they’re do dark.
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@crispalomino I did notice that tangent, yah it needs adjusting and I also agree about doing something to the birds I love the dark but maybe I can adjust it a little so their faces are clearer, thanks for the suggestions!
