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    • Holumpa
      Holumpa @joosterwijk last edited by

      @joosterwijk I think the deeper the storytelling the better as long as it is readable to your target audience. And I think this one is really well done!

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      • KatrinaF
        KatrinaF last edited by

        It's very clear and makes me wonder what will come next. Love the 3 birds smooched together in obvious curiosity knowing the cat is there. I say go for it!

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        • joosterwijk
          joosterwijk @NicolaSchofield last edited by

          @NicolaSchofield @Griffin @Asyas_illos @Nyrryl-Cadiz @Holumpa @KatrinaF Thank you all! It is good to know it does not only work in my head. Thanks!

          https://joosterwijk.nl/
          https://www.instagram.com/joosterwijk.illustration/

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          • joosterwijk
            joosterwijk @Catherine last edited by

            @Catherine Thanks! That is a good idea. The main focus is now indeed on the cat, but the other way around is better!

            https://joosterwijk.nl/
            https://www.instagram.com/joosterwijk.illustration/

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            • joosterwijk
              joosterwijk @AngelinaKizz last edited by

              @AngelinaKizz Thanks Angelina, I’m going to play around with the colours, see if I can make it work.

              https://joosterwijk.nl/
              https://www.instagram.com/joosterwijk.illustration/

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              • Asyas_illos
                Asyas_illos @joosterwijk last edited by Asyas_illos

                @joosterwijk I came back for more! this composition is just so good! My eyes actually go to the bird first because all those birdcages, it’s really striking to me. But it’s also great how you have the contrast between the cat and its background. Really love this piece!

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                • joosterwijk
                  joosterwijk @ThomCharles last edited by

                  @ThomCharles Thanks! In my first sketches I had them looking at each other, but I couldn’t get the birds yes-I-am-free feeling enough. I also now miss the tension, thanks for pointing it out, I’ll try to get it back 🙂

                  https://joosterwijk.nl/
                  https://www.instagram.com/joosterwijk.illustration/

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                  • joosterwijk
                    joosterwijk @Asyas_illos last edited by

                    @Asyas_illos Thanks Asya! I will try not to screw it up 😅

                    https://joosterwijk.nl/
                    https://www.instagram.com/joosterwijk.illustration/

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                    • NicolaSchofield
                      NicolaSchofield @joosterwijk last edited by

                      @joosterwijk I love that the bird is obliviously happy. He's just there thinking, Yes! I'm the luckiest bird in the world!

                      Nicola Schofield

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                      • TessaW
                        TessaW last edited by

                        I'm a little late to the party, but wanted to chime in and say that I love the concept and got it right away! I think you should definitely go with it.

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                        • Larue
                          Larue last edited by

                          Concept read very well and love all those super cute Birdies!

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                          • Johanna Kim
                            Johanna Kim SVS OG @joosterwijk last edited by

                            @joosterwijk The concept is clear in that luck is relative and fleeting. Right now, my eye bounces back and forth between the cat to the main bird. I would suggest when you try to make one of them clearly the main focus by adjusting value and your choice of color.

                            http://www.johannakim.com
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                            • joosterwijk
                              joosterwijk last edited by

                              Thanks again everyone! This is what I made of it. Not much has changed, I tried looking at each other but I like this one better.
                              Lucky_IG.jpg

                              https://joosterwijk.nl/
                              https://www.instagram.com/joosterwijk.illustration/

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