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    • Kristen Lango
      Kristen Lango @Kristen Lango last edited by

      I feel I'm nearing the end on this piece. I don't like to over work things and I've spent a good twenty hours or so on this now - but do let me know if anything pops out as strange. Thanks all!
      NuttersonFarm_v05.jpg

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      https://www.instagram.com/kristendraws/

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      • Melissa_Bailey
        Melissa_Bailey @Kristen Lango last edited by Melissa_Bailey

        @Kristen-Lango LOVE your textures! There's so much movement in this piece! And 20 hours of work ... whew! Know the feeling.

        As you're finalizing, you may want to pay attention to your values and how they impact the storytelling. While the storytelling is much clearer, after seeing all the elements come together, there still is some confusion for me, especially the angle of the plane and how just the tip is going off the page. Controlling your values might help with that, along with adjusting the individual elements, if they're on separate layers.

        What is your focal point? Do you want the eyes to go to the plane & characters first, or the storm, or the farm? Or the windmill? (That's the lightest element with the most contrast, so it does tend to draw the eye.)

        Hope you don't mind that I took a screenshot -- this is to visually show what I'm talking about. I didn't change anything to it but convert to grayscale, allowing us to focus on the value without color.
        ae0890f1-40f8-4787-822e-f5dfca2a9440-Screen Shot 2022-05-17 at 3.04.52 PM.png
        While there are light and darks, the main elements tend to land in a middle value.

        Here is that same image with some value adjustment:
        afbc0dad-05b6-4ef0-847b-ed885c8fdd49-Screen Shot 2022-05-17 value adjustment.jpg
        This example might be a little darker than you were originally going for, but I really wanted to push the values to put the focus on the plane and main characters -- plus, tornadoes usually are accompanied by darkened skies that knock out a lot of light.

        One more thing you may want to consider is adjusting or changing the color of Nutterton -- he is a middle value and doesn't stand out against the similarly colored sky.

        Just a few thoughts. Love all the movement and detail in this piece! I think adjusting some colors and values will really clarify the storytelling and take it to the next level!

        illustrator - author - smiley person
        mbaileyart.com
        instagram.com/mbaileyart/

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        • Kristen Lango
          Kristen Lango @Melissa_Bailey last edited by

          @Melissa_Bailey Thanks so much for this!! I really appreciate you taking the time to do that value study and typing this up! This helps me so much in understanding how to make this more clear and effective... I spent 10 minutes looking at it thinking, hmm something isn't quite right, and this has definitely helped me to see what that is!

          Things are on separate layers so adjusting this should be doable. Thanks again! I'll send another version once I've taken a crack at fixing those values 🙂

          https://www.kristenlango.com/
          https://www.instagram.com/kristendraws/

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          • Melissa_Bailey
            Melissa_Bailey @Kristen Lango last edited by

            @Kristen-Lango you're so welcome! Glad it helped clarify things for you and you know where you want to go with this piece now!

            illustrator - author - smiley person
            mbaileyart.com
            instagram.com/mbaileyart/

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              Robert Henderson @Kristen Lango last edited by

              @Kristen-Lango

              Great textures. It is definitely a fun composition. I would have never thought of a blue cow, which is really comical. You are really developing your own style and heading in an exciting direction.

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              • Kristen Lango
                Kristen Lango @Melissa_Bailey last edited by

                @Melissa_Bailey Definitely it did! 🙂 Here's what I've come up with
                NuttersonFarm_v06.jpg

                https://www.kristenlango.com/
                https://www.instagram.com/kristendraws/

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                • Kristen Lango
                  Kristen Lango @Kristen Lango last edited by Kristen Lango

                  NuttersonFarm_v06_b&W.jpg
                  And here is the black and white of that, which I think makes things more clear... I've left a little white around the characters as well as a way to draw attention them in the chaos of the scene... I'm going back and forth if I like that part or not...

                  https://www.kristenlango.com/
                  https://www.instagram.com/kristendraws/

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                  • Melissa_Bailey
                    Melissa_Bailey @Kristen Lango last edited by

                    @Kristen-Lango MUCH more clear! The focus is now on the main characters. Well done!

                    illustrator - author - smiley person
                    mbaileyart.com
                    instagram.com/mbaileyart/

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                    • Kristen Lango
                      Kristen Lango @Melissa_Bailey last edited by

                      @Melissa_Bailey Aw thank you! You've been such a help 🙂

                      https://www.kristenlango.com/
                      https://www.instagram.com/kristendraws/

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                      • Kristen Lango
                        Kristen Lango @Robert Henderson last edited by

                        @Robert-Henderson Thank you Robert! That's really sweet of you to say and means a lot to me 😊

                        https://www.kristenlango.com/
                        https://www.instagram.com/kristendraws/

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