Society of Visual Storytelling

    SVSLearn Forums

    • Register
    • Login
    • Search
    • Recent
    • Tags
    • Popular
    • Users
    • Groups
    • Search

    Personal projects feedback please:|

    Projects
    22
    122
    12803
    Loading More Posts
    • Oldest to Newest
    • Newest to Oldest
    • Most Votes
    Reply
    • Reply as topic
    Log in to reply
    This topic has been deleted. Only users with topic management privileges can see it.
    • Melissa_Bailey
      Melissa_Bailey @Asyas_illos last edited by

      @Asyas_illos really nice lines in this one! I like how the wolf and tree contrast but have the same lines and movement. Really nice.

      But why not really lean into the curving lines? The horizontal lines of the horizon and tree branch are breaking up that circular movement, interrupting the flow. There are also a lot of lines leading off the left side of the page and nothing to bring the eye back in.

      Hope you don't mind -- I did a drawover to demonstrate just one way you could adjust the composition by leaning into the curving lines. I added more color, too, as it helps me put all the pieces together in a composition. Not sure if this is even the palette you're going for ... is she going to be Little Blue Riding Hood? That could be a cool spin on the tale!

      222800d7-6b47-4be5-9ebe-52a7ac6af25b-ASredraw.jpg

      Anyway, hope this helps. 😊

      illustrator - author - smiley person
      mbaileyart.com
      instagram.com/mbaileyart/

      Asyas_illos 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
      • Asyas_illos
        Asyas_illos @Melissa_Bailey last edited by

        @Melissa_Bailey haha no they won’t be blue just like it to sketch out characters and work around compositional elements. Thanks I do like draw overs it’s helps me to see from others pov and and think of things I may not have seen otherwise. I like all the curves but I’m still unsure if I want to use a background in this one I don’t have many spot illustrations for my portfolio. That being said maybe I could both… just keep the background on a separate layer. Thanks Melissa!

        Melissa_Bailey 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
        • Melissa_Bailey
          Melissa_Bailey @Asyas_illos last edited by

          @Asyas_illos you're so welcome! I think it could be really nice without a background, or maybe an out-of-focus, painterly background. That will keep the focus on the contrasting characters. 👍

          illustrator - author - smiley person
          mbaileyart.com
          instagram.com/mbaileyart/

          1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
          • Jeremy Ross
            Jeremy Ross @Asyas_illos last edited by

            Hi @Asyas_illos, I like C the best. Looking good!

            https://www.instagram.com/jeremyrayross
            https://www.jeremyrayross.com/
            https://twitter.com/jeremyrayross
            https://jeremyrayross.substack.com/

            Asyas_illos 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
            • Asyas_illos
              Asyas_illos @Jeremy Ross last edited by

              @Jeremy-Ross awesome thanks Jeremy!

              1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
              • Asyas_illos
                Asyas_illos last edited by

                Still chipping at this one
                2EDF90BA-6E08-4061-8334-CAE7071AD15F.jpeg

                MelissaJacie 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                • Asyas_illos
                  Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

                  Think I’m done with this one😊
                  538B23F1-F051-4028-968C-B184207F24BC.jpeg

                  Nyrryl  Cadiz 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 7
                  • MelissaJacie
                    MelissaJacie @Asyas_illos last edited by

                    @Asyas_illos I like this background tree branch! Nice work there! Inspiring.

                    Melissa Jacie Art
                    melissajacie@gmail.com
                    melissajacie.com

                    Asyas_illos 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                    • Asyas_illos
                      Asyas_illos @MelissaJacie last edited by

                      @MelissaJacie thank you!

                      1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                      • Asyas_illos
                        Asyas_illos last edited by

                        Starting a spread for Hansel and Gretel
                        C0CDA524-93D2-4448-93C7-D1B9CE23A6CB.jpeg

                        1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                        • Asyas_illos
                          Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

                          2AE224B8-7C32-4CF7-988B-486DFA787B0A.jpeg

                          1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                          • Asyas_illos
                            Asyas_illos last edited by

                            Just got some heads to do lol
                            29A7C9C3-718F-4E60-BAB3-0EFFB1154EB9.jpeg

                            1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                            • Asyas_illos
                              Asyas_illos last edited by

                              Wrapped this up today!
                              EFBE04A8-4115-430C-AB9F-85D7869B5899.jpeg

                              1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 5
                              • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                                Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                @Asyas_illos This is looking great! ❤

                                Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                                Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
                                YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

                                Asyas_illos 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                                • Asyas_illos
                                  Asyas_illos @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                                  @Nyrryl-Cadiz thanks 😊

                                  1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                                  • Asyas_illos
                                    Asyas_illos last edited by

                                    This post is deleted!
                                    1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                                    • Asyas_illos
                                      Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

                                      213C98A9-1EC3-4727-885A-90ACB5C4FF3F.jpeg

                                      1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                                      • Asyas_illos
                                        Asyas_illos last edited by

                                        So i did away with the carousel and went with this instead. I need to do more spot illustrations I realized, for my portfolio… so here we are… again… lol
                                        BDD43893-0C0D-461D-97D3-C6B3A4BC845C.jpeg

                                        1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                                        • Asyas_illos
                                          Asyas_illos last edited by

                                          EB5E8A58-7020-4701-B25C-70EB1DE7D4FC.jpeg

                                          1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                                          • Asyas_illos
                                            Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

                                            Ok finished with this one do You think it’s portfolio material?
                                            F9D36F31-E4E9-44FC-AF1E-3DF4A3238E02.jpeg

                                            1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 5
                                            • First post
                                              Last post