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    • kayleenartlover
      kayleenartlover @Griffin McPherson last edited by

      @Griffin D5AD0B61-FEC1-447C-A36B-59A23C337783.jpeg

      Something like this maybe?

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      • kirsten-mcg
        kirsten-mcg last edited by

        If it were me I think I would make him a pre-teen. This looks very much like a scene from a graphic novel that pre-teens would love!

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        • Griffin McPherson
          Griffin McPherson @kayleenartlover last edited by

          @kayleenartlover hmm, I’ll give that a try

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          • Griffin McPherson
            Griffin McPherson @kayleenartlover last edited by

            @kayleenartlover I tried what you suggested. In some ways I like this a lot more but I feel he looks a little too large now. I might just need to refine the drawing a bit more to get a better idea of it. 57420691-9D81-4D8F-824B-5FECD937146A.jpeg

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            • Griffin McPherson
              Griffin McPherson last edited by

              how’s the pose looking now? I’m not sure if the left arm look too awkward or not B59D2D87-308B-49A6-AAE6-C14AA517E9F9.jpeg

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              • Asyas_illos
                Asyas_illos @Griffin McPherson last edited by Asyas_illos

                @Griffin to be honest I don’t really like any of the newer comps. I think he pulls to much attention, but with proper color and light I guess you could divert some attention back into the shop, because you kind of need to study it to take in everything. In all the positioning possibilities you are covering that second footprint, which I think needs to be clear to connect to the “iron giant”. Maybe move the print to the right side of the road? Or possibly move the character out farther? I know you didn’t want to put them too close together but it’s just one more option. And I apologize if that seemed harsh, I’m a big fan of your art and I know you’ll pull it off however you choose to go about it!
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                • Griffin McPherson
                  Griffin McPherson @Asyas_illos last edited by

                  @Asyas_illos moving the character out farther could be a good solution and it could create more of a floe from the garage to kid to robot. I hadn't thought about the fact that the kid would be covering up that second footprint so I think you're right about either the footprint or the kid being moved. As for the kid drawing too much attention I don't think that will be an issue once color and lighting is finished. He will be about as dark as the rest of the inside of the garage or a bit lighter

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                  • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                    Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Griffin McPherson last edited by

                    @Griffin Hi! I don't know if it's already too late but this is my take on how you should stage the boy. I don't have much time to explain so I hope this redraw below does the trick.

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                    • Eliana Bastidas
                      Eliana Bastidas @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                      @Nyrryl-Cadiz I think you nailed it! This one looks great.

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                      • Griffin McPherson
                        Griffin McPherson @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                        @Nyrryl-Cadiz oh this could definitely work, thanks!

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                        • Asyas_illos
                          Asyas_illos @Griffin McPherson last edited by

                          @Griffin @Nyrryl-Cadiz yep this one is great!

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                          • Griffin McPherson
                            Griffin McPherson last edited by

                            UPDATE: So here’s what I ended up deciding on. Still open to feedback though I’m not sure I’d return to this piece for a little while. ECD9D481-01AD-45EA-ABEA-C5A9C124A3F7.jpeg

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                            • Asyas_illos
                              Asyas_illos @Griffin McPherson last edited by

                              @Griffin turned out great!

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                              • kirsten-mcg
                                kirsten-mcg @Griffin McPherson last edited by kirsten-mcg

                                @Griffin I really like the boy running after the robot! Maybe to make it even stronger you could try playing with the value a little more? Maybe try lightening the sky and the hills bit to help the background really separate from the foreground? But really a great piece overall even if you just left it!

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