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    • Kori Jensen
      Kori Jensen @Asyas_illos last edited by

      @Asyas_illos Im curious to know

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      • Kori Jensen
        Kori Jensen @AngelinaKizz last edited by

        @AngelinaKizz yes, wow I didn't think my background was so obscure. lol thank you for your patience 🙂

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        • AngelinaKizz
          AngelinaKizz @Kori Jensen last edited by

          @Kori-Jensen so based on your previous image with the perspective grid, you're viewer would be looking at the vanishing point (the red convergence of perspective lines). So that would mean the viewer is looking up. What you have, looking down at the street, would create a different vanishing point, and a entirely different perspective on your character. It's both possible to look at him from above (birds eye) or below (worms eye) but if you wanted the street to be visible below him, you'd need to put your vanishing point lower than your character and the street would be quite far off in the distance. I think you'd be best to change the perspective on your buildings to have height towards your current vanishing point.

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          • AngelinaKizz
            AngelinaKizz @Kori Jensen last edited by

            @Kori-Jensen 65FDAA8D-FA18-4CB5-8BAC-7E8A5DF85964.jpeg

            Here’s a super rough draw over, in the current perspective grid you have laid out, the buildings would be tall without a road seen. I hope that makes sense.

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            • willicreate
              willicreate last edited by

              It's awesome that you're challenging yourself with a complex composition. A few things stand out.

              • I think what's confusing is on the initial take the body motion looks like he's falling headfirst. But with the background, it looks like he's tumbling into a position of being parallel with the ground, but the position of the lower half doesn't match the movement of the upper.
              • The arm and hand positions look off. I can only recommend to have a photograph taken of someone performing the pose.
              • The feet look a tad long. Could use some foreshortening.
              • The area between the hood and chestplate bothers me. Seems odd to have the cloth tucked under the corner of the plate.
              • The rope belt looks tied like a thin string opposed to a thick rope. Plenty of references online.
              • Your point perspective gird isn’t setup properly. The boxes should be wider towards the camera, smaller at a distance. I saw two points perspective in an earlier image. Are you utilizing three point perspective?
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              • Kori Jensen
                Kori Jensen @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                @AngelinaKizz Very interesting so you are suggesting that I utilize the vanishing point to extend to the edge of the page instead of a T-intersection at the end?

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                • Kori Jensen
                  Kori Jensen @willicreate last edited by

                  @willicreate I am trying to utilize that two point perspective as much as I can, but I think I might have gotten a bit confused. I think this next time around I am going to put 2 color points. As for the body, I get what you mean about the position of the top and bottom of the body. I wish a possessed the skill to do that, but at this point I haven't tried it just yet. I love the way he looks at the moment. I don't mind the size of his rope, but next time I'll add another wrap around to add some body to it. I agree with the feet, but in a way, to me it adds a bit more length to the legs and does not look too, human... if that makes sence.

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                  • Asyas_illos
                    Asyas_illos last edited by

                    @AngelinaKizz this is what my mind was seeing also

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                    • AngelinaKizz
                      AngelinaKizz @Kori Jensen last edited by

                      @Kori-Jensen not quite. It would be better suited that your buildings be vertical instead of horizontal.

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                      • willicreate
                        willicreate last edited by

                        A draw over to go with my notes from yesterday.
                        Untitled-10.jpg

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                        • Kori Jensen
                          Kori Jensen @willicreate last edited by

                          @willicreate I think I have most of your edits rectified, what do you think?ninja.jpg

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                          • willicreate
                            willicreate last edited by

                            @Kori-Jensen Yeah, I think the image better informs the direction the character is falling towards. Looking forward to the finish piece.

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                            • Kori Jensen
                              Kori Jensen last edited by

                              I hope you like the line art so far. What do you guys think of the city scape? I am going to be adding the broken glass very soon, I just wanted you're guys input 🙂 THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR YOUR HELP SO FAR!ninja.jpg

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