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    • AngelinaKizz
      AngelinaKizz @Kori Jensen last edited by

      @Kori-Jensen 65FDAA8D-FA18-4CB5-8BAC-7E8A5DF85964.jpeg

      Here’s a super rough draw over, in the current perspective grid you have laid out, the buildings would be tall without a road seen. I hope that makes sense.

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      • willicreate
        willicreate last edited by

        It's awesome that you're challenging yourself with a complex composition. A few things stand out.

        • I think what's confusing is on the initial take the body motion looks like he's falling headfirst. But with the background, it looks like he's tumbling into a position of being parallel with the ground, but the position of the lower half doesn't match the movement of the upper.
        • The arm and hand positions look off. I can only recommend to have a photograph taken of someone performing the pose.
        • The feet look a tad long. Could use some foreshortening.
        • The area between the hood and chestplate bothers me. Seems odd to have the cloth tucked under the corner of the plate.
        • The rope belt looks tied like a thin string opposed to a thick rope. Plenty of references online.
        • Your point perspective gird isn’t setup properly. The boxes should be wider towards the camera, smaller at a distance. I saw two points perspective in an earlier image. Are you utilizing three point perspective?
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        • Kori Jensen
          Kori Jensen @AngelinaKizz last edited by

          @AngelinaKizz Very interesting so you are suggesting that I utilize the vanishing point to extend to the edge of the page instead of a T-intersection at the end?

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          • Kori Jensen
            Kori Jensen @willicreate last edited by

            @willicreate I am trying to utilize that two point perspective as much as I can, but I think I might have gotten a bit confused. I think this next time around I am going to put 2 color points. As for the body, I get what you mean about the position of the top and bottom of the body. I wish a possessed the skill to do that, but at this point I haven't tried it just yet. I love the way he looks at the moment. I don't mind the size of his rope, but next time I'll add another wrap around to add some body to it. I agree with the feet, but in a way, to me it adds a bit more length to the legs and does not look too, human... if that makes sence.

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            • Asyas_illos
              Asyas_illos last edited by

              @AngelinaKizz this is what my mind was seeing also

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              • AngelinaKizz
                AngelinaKizz @Kori Jensen last edited by

                @Kori-Jensen not quite. It would be better suited that your buildings be vertical instead of horizontal.

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                • willicreate
                  willicreate last edited by

                  A draw over to go with my notes from yesterday.
                  Untitled-10.jpg

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                  • Kori Jensen
                    Kori Jensen @willicreate last edited by

                    @willicreate I think I have most of your edits rectified, what do you think?ninja.jpg

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                    • willicreate
                      willicreate last edited by

                      @Kori-Jensen Yeah, I think the image better informs the direction the character is falling towards. Looking forward to the finish piece.

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                      • Kori Jensen
                        Kori Jensen last edited by

                        I hope you like the line art so far. What do you guys think of the city scape? I am going to be adding the broken glass very soon, I just wanted you're guys input 🙂 THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR YOUR HELP SO FAR!ninja.jpg

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