Society of Visual Storytelling

    SVSLearn Forums

    • Register
    • Login
    • Search
    • Recent
    • Tags
    • Popular
    • Users
    • Groups
    • Search

    Flying Pigs WIP, Feedback appreciated!

    Illustration
    9
    17
    4112
    Loading More Posts
    • Oldest to Newest
    • Newest to Oldest
    • Most Votes
    Reply
    • Reply as topic
    Log in to reply
    This topic has been deleted. Only users with topic management privileges can see it.
    • Leontine
      Leontine last edited by

      I love the composition and the brightness! Its really fun to watch! More focus on the character is a very good idea! Keep up the good work Maile!

      Leontine
      "A picture is worth a thousand words."

      https://leontineillustrator.com
      https://www.instagram.com/leontine.illustrator/
      http://www.facebook.com/leontineillustration

      1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
      • Maile McCarthy
        Maile McCarthy @Maile McCarthy last edited by

        Hi everyone. Thank you for the feedback! Here's my update.

        I added text to the image. Did that fix the feeling that the top was too empty, or do you still think it needs more?

        upload-d2e53675-251b-4be8-8a79-097a08a4a308

        @Jiří-Kůs @Shannon-Perkins (and everyone, really), Thanks for pointing out the contrast/focal point issues with the girl. I worked on this a bunch, and I think it's a lot better in the new version. I did keep everything really saturated. Not sure if that's working or not.

        @Fabienne Thanks for the paint over. That helped a lot. I like the space you created moving the foreground element down. (I also really liked the girl sitting on top of the house-- I didn't keep it, but I did add some more kids to the other windows. I think I might render them out a little more).

        @Leontine-Gaasenbeek Thanks for the feedback. It's super helpful to hear that multiple people are having the same issues.

        Twitter @MaileMcCarthy
        www.mailemccarthyillustration.com

        1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
        • Lee Holland
          Lee Holland last edited by

          Looks great to me, Really fun.

          https://www.facebook.com/pages/Lee-Holland-illustration/285517801577676?
          https://www.instagram.com/lee_holland_illustration/
          http://lholla56.wix.com/lee-holland

          Maile McCarthy 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
          • Maile McCarthy
            Maile McCarthy @Lee Holland last edited by

            @Lee-Holland Thanks 🙂

            Twitter @MaileMcCarthy
            www.mailemccarthyillustration.com

            1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
            • Leontine
              Leontine last edited by

              Well done, its so much fun to watch!

              Leontine
              "A picture is worth a thousand words."

              https://leontineillustrator.com
              https://www.instagram.com/leontine.illustrator/
              http://www.facebook.com/leontineillustration

              1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
              • Fabienne
                Fabienne last edited by

                Superb! There is so much to explore!
                Only one point: Which house is in the front? Shouldn't be the kids-house darker, because it's closer to the viewer?

                Maile McCarthy 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                • Maile McCarthy
                  Maile McCarthy @Fabienne last edited by

                  @Fabienne Yes, I see that now. The front one definitely needs to be darker. I'll go update it. Thank you!

                  Twitter @MaileMcCarthy
                  www.mailemccarthyillustration.com

                  1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                  • Dan Tavis
                    Dan Tavis last edited by

                    Awesome work at creating action in this piece Maile! The incline of the houses really adds a great line of motion.

                    1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                    • Jiří Kůs
                      Jiří Kůs last edited by

                      Great , I was immediately looking at the character 🙂

                      Follow me on
                      https://www.instagram.com/yiri_kus/
                      http://yirikus.tumblr.com/
                      https://www.facebook.com/yirikus/

                      Maile McCarthy 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                      • Maile McCarthy
                        Maile McCarthy @Jiří Kůs last edited by

                        @Jiří-Kůs @Dan-Tavis Thanks so much!

                        Twitter @MaileMcCarthy
                        www.mailemccarthyillustration.com

                        1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                        • S
                          Shannon Perkins last edited by

                          I like the update, much easier to see the character, and the atmospheric perspective you used on the farthest house really adds a sense of depth. Also, having the text in there fills in that empty space I mentioned earlier. Picture books need that open space for text, earlier I was looking at it from a stand-alone piece. Good work!

                          http://shannonreneeperkins.tumblr.com/

                          1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                          • Isaac Vargas Cardenas
                            Isaac Vargas Cardenas last edited by

                            This is really nice, I like it very much 🙂

                            1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                            • First post
                              Last post