The Cloud King WIP | Feedback please!
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Super cute! I love it!
Is there a way to draw the eye more to the kids handing over the diaper? Because then I don’t think you’d need to have the text present. As for the flooding, I would maybe add some windows to the houses where you have the water level, to show that the water level is beyond the grass line. Maybe a small amount of shading on the sides of the houses to slightly emphasize the water line ( not enough to draw a ton of focus, just to create clairity ) -
@KevinTreaccar You were clear, but I suppose I was a bit too tired/out of it to do the same
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@AngelinaKizz Thanks! Hopefully, I'll be able to draw more attention to them with shading and everything. I'm working on the sketch more and now how some more detail in the village. Thanks for the feedback!
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Here is the new version of the village with more detail. I decided less is more and took out a lot of the houses--which makes me feel a lot better! Still planning to add more detail to the water, but not sure exactly how I want to go about it...
Haven't quite decided what I want to do about the text
I experimented with a couple of things, but I might wait till I have the shading in to make a decision. -
@miranda-hoover are you going to keep his crown? It was so cute!
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@miranda-hoover I think the image is solid without the text and having the image cropped in allows the viewer to focus in on the village as well. Also, agree with @Asyas_illos that the crown was really cute.
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Thanks, @Asyas_illos and @Stephanie-H ! Glad you like the crown! It's still there--I'd just grabbed a screenshot last time to show the village WIP.
Here's a look at the inking WIP and trying it out without the text. My next challenge is the water & rain
Looking at it on the screen I think I'll need to thicken some of the lines--probably on the kids too
I think I'll attempt an ink wash for shading, since that fits the wet/rainly feel... -
@miranda-hoover Your line work is always so clean and beautiful. Agree with you about thickening some of the lines where you want to draw our eyes. Also like the idea of an ink wash for the rain. Watch out for the toilet paper role in the bottom right corner. It's a bit squashed/flattened. Looking forward to seeing the finished illustration.
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I didn’t understand the story. Even though it’s clear that the town is being rained on and the kids are bringing the clouds king diapers I think this story is a little too complex to convey in a single image personally. Despite that I absolutely love the design and the contrast in scale that you have going on here.
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@Johanna-Kim Thanks!
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@Griffin-McPherson Oh no! It's probably too late for me to make any big changes, though. Do you know if adding text back in will help at all?
Thanks for the feedback! Happy you like the design.
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@miranda-hoover after seeing your latest version that shows the flooding of the town my clearly I think the story is more understandable. I wouldn’t worry about texts and generally they don’t like text for the contest pieces anyways
