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    • Miriam
      Miriam last edited by Miriam

      Aww, I like it! The tree was cut down, but it will be a Christmas tree! ♥ 🎄

      I like the tree's face & how the tip of the tree top looks like a hairstyle.

      The woman looking off to the side & waving draws a lot of attention off the page. I think it's alright, since it's right next to the tree's face with its big eyes, so that keeps you back in the image. But you might try having her checking the ropes tying down the tree (such as a rope coming in through her window, or tied just above it). But if you are expanding the canvas, or moving the car, this may take care of the issue.

      I know what you mean about last-minute. I had a list of ideas for Kamari, but I've been busy with another project, and haven't even started sketching! Hopefully, I'll still have time to work on it, but at least my other project is coming along.

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      • AngelinaKizz
        AngelinaKizz last edited by

        Thanks for the input everyone.
        I’ve opened up the canvas and pushed the houses back, I realized that they were in effect the same size as the car which would never make sense haha. I’m also working on the faces of the parents though they’ll be in shadow under the tree so not the focal point. It still has a long way to go before I feel like it’s ready to submit and if It doesn’t end up done in time, it’ll be just a Christmas illo 🙂

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        • Miriam
          Miriam @AngelinaKizz last edited by

          @AngelinaKizz The change to the houses and space in the image have made a big difference.

          I think it's fine to have the tree with a stump. It's a nice idea to have the roots so it could be planted, but it's not very realistic, since even though conifers have shallower roots than some other trees, the root ball would still need to be much bigger than this to sustain the tree. (In general, plants have about the same mass underground as they do above ground.)

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          • Asyas_illos
            Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by

            @AngelinaKizz it’s looking good I might consider even leaving out the parent faces all together I think it’s kinda funny and cute that the trees so big they can barely see out. Also like the wrapped end of the tree makes it less brutal lol

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            • AngelinaKizz
              AngelinaKizz last edited by

              Gonna leave it here for a Bit, I might be at that point where I’m ready to call it done. 24383232-E620-409A-BF22-4F0B8B510BEB.jpeg

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                kirsten-mcg @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                @AngelinaKizz This is a fun concept! I know it's getting close to the deadline, but just a thought in case you have time for a little more work on this before submitting. I wonder if giving the sack over the tree's roots more of a burlap texture would help your story read better? Burlap is very rough, and right now it looks smooth. The first time I looked at this I missed that it was actually a live tree! I think a little more work on the root ball would fix that. 🙂

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                • AngelinaKizz
                  AngelinaKizz @kirsten-mcg last edited by

                  @kirsten-mcg oh your right !!!! Good catch! Thanks!

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                  • AngelinaKizz
                    AngelinaKizz @kirsten-mcg last edited by

                    @kirsten-mcg ACF994DB-0ADD-4CD9-94BB-F0D87BB5DD9F.jpeg
                    I added the burlap, how does it feel?

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                    • Asyas_illos
                      Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                      @AngelinaKizz hmm I think it looks good but it stands out more now as it feels more textured than the rest of the image

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                      • AngelinaKizz
                        AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

                        @Asyas_illos darn you're right. I'll play with the opacity on it, blur out some spots and I usually like to add water color paper texture... thanks Asya

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                        • kirsten-mcg
                          kirsten-mcg @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                          @AngelinaKizz It definitely feels more like burlap now! I think it helps. You could also try painting a burlap texture with bigger strokes instead of just overlaying a texture. It might meld with the rest of the image better that way and take care of the issue Asya caught.

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