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    Critiques Please! • Nativity Triptych • WIP

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    • Miriam
      Miriam @Miriam last edited by Miriam

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      • Miriam
        Miriam @Chantal Goetheer last edited by

        Thanks, @Chantal-Goetheer! Yes, I’ll have to take some pictures when they are completed.

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        • Miriam
          Miriam last edited by Miriam

          Here are my concerns at the moment — aside from the fact that I want to finish by tomorrow (Tuesday) afternoon! (The centerpieces are for a party on Saturday & we need to assemble about 30 of them.):

          • Does the arch look ok on the Nativity / Holy family?
          It’s meant to suggest the stable / cave they stayed in.

          • Is it working to have the shepherds’ head coverings & crook a lighter value when the other two images are full silhouettes (other than the background layer)?
          I thought the shapes would be hard to distinguish in full black.
          (I think having the lighter values of the background & sky help. Plus, I plan to add a lot of texture to all the layers.)

          • I was also wondering about the sky for the wisemen.
          If it was a stand alone image, I would draw the star. But I didn't really like the idea of having a large star in all three images.

          Should I just see if the textures & some regular stars can take care of it? Or should I try adding a moon?

          (I also need to finish cleaning up the wisemen & camels.)

          • Please let me know if you have any other critiques or suggestions!

          @ArtMelC, @kirsten-mcg, @Frogpunzel, @Sarah-VanDam , & @Chantal-Goetheer Thanks for all the compliments, comments & encouragement!

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          • Chantal Goetheer
            Chantal Goetheer @Miriam last edited by

            @Miriam
            For the arch it looks fine. Maybe on the sheep side you could have a slight hint of the wall as well.

            I get that you dont want another star, wouldn't quite fit. The other one works because it's the angel coming. But maybe the star of the nativity scène could spread some light to the side of the wisemen? As it does downward to the nativity?

            The silhouette I think should also read fine when it is just all black like the others. Could you try to see how it looks? It looks seperate enough to clearly see a shepherd silhouette to me. It will maybe work best with the light when all silhouettes are the same colour/value wise?

            Good luck finishing it!

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            • kirsten-mcg
              kirsten-mcg @Miriam last edited by

              @Miriam I love the look of the uneven arch over the Nativity.

              I think the shepherds should be silhouettes like all the other figures. They look like they would read just fine without the lighter color for their head covering. If I squint my eyes it all blends together, and I still see a shepherd.

              I agree with @Chantal-Goetheer that making a little light from the star over the nativity bleed over into the wiseman image would work well. That way you can still suggest that they're following a star, but not need to repeat it.

              Good luck! And show us the finished pieces!

              Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/kirsten.mcgonigal.art/
              Portfolio Site: www.kirstenmcgonigalart.com

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                Frogpunzel @Miriam last edited by

                @Miriam I would have to agree with what has been said. I think spilling a little of the stars light onto the wise men's side is a great idea. For me I didn't realize the arch was to represent the stable/cave, but I thought it was more of a designed border. I do think it looks fine, I just didn't quite get the whole idea. This is a really neat project, I have wanted to attempt a nativity scene for some time but not quite sure how I would want to do it.

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                • Miriam
                  Miriam last edited by

                  @Chantal-Goetheer @kirsten-mcg & @Frogpunzel

                  Thanks for the advice!

                  Adding the bit of wall on the manger scene really helps. I also lowered the arch a little.

                  I tried adding a glow like it’s coming from the star, but it didn’t look right because there’s a gap of sky in between. I’d have to move the star over for it to work, but I like having the star right above the manger.

                  So I tried adding a moon for the wisemen, plus a little glow on the town & I like it.

                  You guys were right, it is better for the shepherds to be fully silhouette to match the other frames. I also added glow on the town to match the wisemen image.

                  Now I just need to lighten up the layers with a textured mask & try to keep the same glow effects.

                  @Frogpunzel It would be great to see your version of a Nativity.

                  Wisemen samples.jpg

                  revised.jpg

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                  • kirsten-mcg
                    kirsten-mcg @Miriam last edited by

                    @Miriam This turned out beautiful! I like that all three images have something glowing in the sky. And the shepherds look great as silhouettes. 😁

                    Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/kirsten.mcgonigal.art/
                    Portfolio Site: www.kirstenmcgonigalart.com

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                    • Chantal Goetheer
                      Chantal Goetheer @Miriam last edited by

                      @Miriam it will be awesome Saturday!!

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                      • ArtistErin
                        ArtistErin @Miriam last edited by

                        @Miriam Very nice 🙂 Meant to chime in earlier... love seeing how things unfolded for you 🙂

                        Erin Richardson
                        instagram.com/erinrichardsondesigns21
                        www.erinrichardsondesigns.com

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                        • Miriam
                          Miriam last edited by Miriam

                          @kirsten-mcg @Chantal-Goetheer @ArtistErin @ArtMelC @Sarah-VanDam @Frogpunzel

                          So, it turns out that it looked VERY different printed out & was much too dark overall, and the glow pretty much erased the star / angel.

                          Fortunately, I had everything on separate layers, & was able to recolor each one & adjust a few things.

                          NATIVITY.jpg

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                          • Miriam
                            Miriam @Miriam last edited by

                            I♥ layers.
                            Ha, ha I should make a shirt.

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                              Frogpunzel @Miriam last edited by

                              @Miriam Love it!

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                              • kirsten-mcg
                                kirsten-mcg @Miriam last edited by

                                @Miriam The joys of printing. 🥴

                                Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/kirsten.mcgonigal.art/
                                Portfolio Site: www.kirstenmcgonigalart.com

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                                • Miriam
                                  Miriam last edited by Miriam

                                  Thanks for all the help & support on this project. Here's how it turned out:

                                  Nativity Centerpieces.jpg

                                  (We put one on each table, but I combined the photos to show the different sides.)

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                                  • ArtMelC
                                    ArtMelC @Miriam last edited by

                                    @Miriam beautiful! Merry Christmas to you ❤️

                                    www.instagram.com/art.melc.illo/
                                    www.artmelc.com
                                    I write weekly on mondayblues.substack.com

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                                    • Chantal Goetheer
                                      Chantal Goetheer @Miriam last edited by

                                      @Miriam wow it looks really pretty!!! And a belastend Merry Christmas! Thanks for sharing, was wondering the other day how it had turned out.

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                                      • kirsten-mcg
                                        kirsten-mcg @Miriam last edited by

                                        @Miriam These turned out gorgeous! Seeing them makes me want to try doing some for next year. Thank you for sharing the final result!

                                        Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/kirsten.mcgonigal.art/
                                        Portfolio Site: www.kirstenmcgonigalart.com

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                                        • ArtistErin
                                          ArtistErin last edited by

                                          Love how these turned out!!! 🙂

                                          Erin Richardson
                                          instagram.com/erinrichardsondesigns21
                                          www.erinrichardsondesigns.com

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