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    March 3rd Thurs - her lovely pet

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    • Cali Ward
      Cali Ward last edited by

      So if anybody has color suggestions i'm still open to comments, I'll keep saturation on the girl and snake, I think I like the colors chosen... hopefully I can pull off a funky print of some sort. @nowayme Thanks for the added suggestion, it was good for me to look at the feet again - kneeling is a hard position to hit... especially if I want to keep this girl in a dress. I adjusted the foot down a bit and did my own little draw over to double check things. better? @natiwata i knocked down the chest and made her head just a little bigger... faded out those lines too... hopefully I can pull this one off 🙂 Thanks ya'll

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      • NoWayMe
        NoWayMe @Cali Ward last edited by

        @Cali-Ward I think it's a lot better! Your draw over of the legs really showed the form, however in your final sketch they still look a little flat... maybe it's because the snake should be a little higher ? It looks like the snake is pushing the legs flat instead of lying on them... But it's much better than it was!

        Also, I like the other changes you made! Another thing you might consider is making her eyes a little bigger. It could help have her look a little younger and also add to the sense of "little crazy" your going for!

        Finally, I like the color you chose! To harmonize the palette a little maybe you could take colors from your girl/snake and use them in the background character (for example, use a paler/desaturated version of the snake green on the boy's shirt instead of a bluish green)

        These are simply suggestion though, I really like where you are going with this, it's a really nice piece! Keep updating us!

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        • Cali Ward
          Cali Ward last edited by

          So, I feel like I was waiting for someone to tell me to reconsider the snake's face... I didn't like it, but I didn't want to redo it... I don't usually draw mean looking animals, or "cool" stuff... ha! My stuff might be described as cute... not cool. But I did redraw it and think it will bring a cool factor.
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          And... I think the flat legs are a perspective issue... I'm probably not nailing it, but they flatten out because of the higher perspective... I like the movement of the snake, so call me stubborn, but thank you so much for the input @nowayme

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          • Chip Valecek
            Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @Cali Ward last edited by

            @Cali-Ward not to be that person, but if its a python or boa constrictor it wouldn't have fangs like that 🙂


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            • Rich Green
              Rich Green SVS OG @Cali Ward last edited by Rich Green

              @Cali-Ward The rest of the piece is so strong that I don't think you should give up on the girls legs just yet.

              I actually do not think the problem is with the legs themselves. However it is with how you have the snake positioned over them.

              If you look at your own draw over of the legs in the red - you can see they have a volume to them - like cylinders. But if you look at it closely you will notice that your snake actually cuts through the middle of those cylinders instead of draping over the top of them.

              If you were to adjust the body of the snake to give that illusion of volume in the legs, I think it will solve the problem.

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              • Cali Ward
                Cali Ward last edited by

                Give me a consensus ya'll... inaccurate python with pattern and fangs or some sort of green snake hybrid..? I like the fangs. So stubborn.

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                • Cali Ward
                  Cali Ward last edited by

                  Ooooo @Rich Green, that helps alot, thank you!

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                  • Cali Ward
                    Cali Ward last edited by

                    Snake hybrid... fixed legs and snake body... I think I'll still add some sort of pattern.
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                    • Rich Green
                      Rich Green SVS OG @Cali Ward last edited by Rich Green

                      @Cali-Ward - I really think that makes all the difference with her legs - they no longer appear flattened out to me and it looks very natural now. Nice job!

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                      • Chip Valecek
                        Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @Cali Ward last edited by

                        LOL sorry about that. Your piece has a realism feel to it, that is the only reason I mentioned it. Last month 3rd thursday I did a snake with mice and it had fangs when it probably shouldn't but since it was more cartoon like I felt I could get away with it. Still like where this is headed!
                        @Cali-Ward said:

                        Give me a consensus ya'll... inaccurate python with pattern and fangs or some sort of green snake hybrid..? I like the fangs. So stubborn.


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                        • Cali Ward
                          Cali Ward last edited by

                          no, @chip valecek, it is a valid comment for sure, thanks! in all, it still helped the image improve, and someone else would say the same thing. Its good for me to get over my stubborn defensiveness and take some criticism 🙂

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