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    • chrisaakins
      chrisaakins last edited by

      I am thankful for the critique of my Thankful piece done a couple years ago. Here is my redo after @Lee-White and @Jake-Parker and @Will-Terry had their say. I really appreciate the feedback.
      458539F4-11DD-440D-B4B7-E65B1064C202.jpeg

      Chris Akins
      www.chrisakinsart.com
      www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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      • Jeremy Ross
        Jeremy Ross @chrisaakins last edited by

        Looks great @chrisaakins! Can you please share the original version for comparison?

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        • ArtistErin
          ArtistErin @chrisaakins last edited by

          @chrisaakins Cool! I love how you took their advice and posted your redraw so quickly too. Love your work so much πŸ™‚

          Erin Richardson
          instagram.com/erinrichardsondesigns21
          www.erinrichardsondesigns.com

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          • chrisaakins
            chrisaakins @Jeremy Ross last edited by

            @Jeremy-Ross here you go:
            3770CDD9-4D5C-4708-944F-CB7E068F2C38.jpeg

            Chris Akins
            www.chrisakinsart.com
            www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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            • chrisaakins
              chrisaakins @ArtistErin last edited by

              @ArtistErin aww thanks, Erin! You are so kind.

              Chris Akins
              www.chrisakinsart.com
              www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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              • Jeremy Ross
                Jeremy Ross @chrisaakins last edited by

                Love it @chrisaakins, great improvement and better eye flow!

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                • kirsten-mcg
                  kirsten-mcg @chrisaakins last edited by

                  @chrisaakins This looks great!

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                  • Lee White
                    Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG last edited by

                    Nice edit Chris! So much better!

                    SVS Faculty Instructor
                    www.leewhiteillustration.com

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                    • Larue
                      Larue @chrisaakins last edited by

                      @chrisaakins Kinda cool how we as storytellers and artists can look at our final piece and think, "ya, I'm happy with that " and then when others see things we don't and make suggestions it's like dang, that looks so much better!. As much I thought the original was great I really think this helps tell the story...assuming it was about this mouse family joining the party! Nice!

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                      • Jean Watson
                        Jean Watson @chrisaakins last edited by

                        @chrisaakins Everything about this is so beautiful! Wish I was there ... πŸ™‚ Tiny query: I wonder whether the mouse carrying the basket should be rotated slightly more towards the main gathering where she is heading, since she is no longer greeting the two squirrels?

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                        • chrisaakins
                          chrisaakins @Jean Watson last edited by

                          @JeanW let’s just consider it one of those stage type placement thingies where she didn’t want to turn away from the audience. πŸ˜‚

                          Chris Akins
                          www.chrisakinsart.com
                          www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                          • Jean Watson
                            Jean Watson @Jean Watson last edited by

                            @JeanW Fair enough, her time to shine! πŸ˜‚

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                            • ArtistErin
                              ArtistErin @Larue last edited by

                              @Larue yeah for sure... amazing how we help each other, I'll say blind spots are seriously that, I'll speak for myself. I am leaning on crits for this reason πŸ™‚

                              Erin Richardson
                              instagram.com/erinrichardsondesigns21
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