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    • Richy.s.ayala
      Richy.s.ayala last edited by

      Hi Y'all! It has been very useful for me as an illustrator to be able to drop pieces here and get some feedback, so I come here once again for help with a piece I am doing for my editorial portfolio. My agents gave me the prompt in the form of an article called "Tech Overload" and so I did my best to communicate what that feels like to me. Please let me know if you have any suggestions or even just to approve of it. THANK YOU ALL FOR BEING SO INCLUSIVE!!
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      https://www.instagram.com/richy.s.ayala/
      http://www.richyart.com

      KathrynAdebayo Larue Chantal Goetheer MerryMary 4 Replies Last reply Reply Quote 3
      • KathrynAdebayo
        KathrynAdebayo @Richy.s.ayala last edited by

        @Richy-s-ayala This looks really cool.

        Here's my off-the-wall suggestion in case it's of use to you: I'd increase the value of the screen (or screens) in front of the man -- the one that says "look" in particular. My first glance at the piece (on a small screen) gave me the impression that part of the face was missing, but really it's just a value optical-illusion. Maybe the light colored screen and the light colored background blended together for me during my first impression.

        Thanks for sharing this piece. It really conveys tech overload well.

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        • Larue
          Larue @Richy.s.ayala last edited by

          @Richy-s-ayal
          To add to Kathryns comment, a blue glow reflection on his face would be great and then the side facing to us could a darker value.

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          • Chantal Goetheer
            Chantal Goetheer @Richy.s.ayala last edited by

            @Richy-s-ayala Iike how he seems to have no choice but look at the screen because he's held by the wires of the machines. Totally speaks tech overload.

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            • Richy.s.ayala
              Richy.s.ayala @KathrynAdebayo last edited by

              @KathrynAdebayo This is exactly the kind of thing I was looking for. Thank you!

              https://www.instagram.com/richy.s.ayala/
              http://www.richyart.com

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              • Richy.s.ayala
                Richy.s.ayala @Larue last edited by

                @Larue Awesomne suggestion, when I make a busy piece like this it's easy to overlook the simplest things. Thank you!

                https://www.instagram.com/richy.s.ayala/
                http://www.richyart.com

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                • Richy.s.ayala
                  Richy.s.ayala @Chantal Goetheer last edited by

                  @Chantal-Goetheer Appreciate it! I related to that man so much haha.

                  https://www.instagram.com/richy.s.ayala/
                  http://www.richyart.com

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                  • MerryMary
                    MerryMary @Richy.s.ayala last edited by MerryMary

                    @Richy-s-ayala I like this a lot! It feels overwhelming in a really good way. The eyes and all the notes that say look, feel very accurate to how technology can be invasive, and attention steeling. I also like that he is standing on grass. It seems to say there is a natural world somewhere, but it is crowded out by machines on every side. Very cool 😎

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                    • Richy.s.ayala
                      Richy.s.ayala @MerryMary last edited by

                      @MerryMary Thank you so much! I really really appreciate this comment because you caught on to every single thing I was trying to communicate. That is what the grass and the eyes were supposed to represent 🙂

                      https://www.instagram.com/richy.s.ayala/
                      http://www.richyart.com

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