A made a kids picture book (for my kids)
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It is brilliant, and fantastic, and the illustrations are perfect! Many rounds of applause and standing ovations to you, sir. Thank you very much for sharing!
If it were less well done then I wouldn't bother giving any criticism, but since there is literally only one thing lacking (in my opinion) I shall say this: the writing just needs a bit of editing. Even an adjustment in just one or two parts would bring the book to new levels of awesomeness. I know you said you haven't made it to win any awards, but I really do think it is deserving of official publishment (a new word I just made; good, isn't it?). I've seen much worse creations being self-published, and would love to see something as brilliant as this go out into the world.
(Let me know if you'd like my specific suggestions regarding literary edits, otherwise you can call it finished and carry on being rightly proud of a wonderful book.)
And I'm forward to seeing your next one!
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@Robyn-Hepburn thank you so much for your feedback, very kind of you. Publishment should be a word for sure
On my "back of mind" to-do list; I want to take another look at the book, I will polish the illustrations, and I know that sections will need re-writing 
so if you have time to give some feedback, it would be greatly appreciated 
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LMAO what a fun little story with an ending I thought was gonna come, then thought it wasn't then surprised again when it did. The illustrations are fun as well.
I like what you said about finishing something. I did that a few years ago with my own little book I've sold at Emerald City Comic Con the last few years. But it's time for me to do something else, and actually work towards finishing it.
Cheers man, great job!
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Cheers @mymightypencil! Sounds like a fun project!
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@mymightypencil this looks awesome.
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Super cute! You did a great job!
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Super cute and a good little lesson as well.
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It looks amazing! Well done! Congratulations!
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You did such a great job with this! Love the illustrations.
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@mymightypencil I have done it! I have procrastinated from what I was supposed to do, by scribbling all over your book. Now to figure out how to attach it...
Edits for Someone Ate Pete.pdf
I'm sure that if you went the traditional publishment route they would give you better suggestions, but at least this gives you some idea of a different perspective. My suggestions are definitely not definitive so take or leave 'em, I shall not be offended!
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Thats so sweet!
who cares about awards. If your kids like it it should be enough for now, and you finished a project!
i love it and i love your style! Keep going
P.s. i just took a look at the changes from @Robyn-Hepburn , kind of good suggestions.
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Fantastic!
