7 Aug 2023, 01:43
(WIP) Wizard of Oz portfolio pieces- critiques welcome
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@kayleenartlover Beautiful character design! I am not a professional so take what I say with grain of salt
Because I did the figure drawing class not long ago I noticed that the poses of the girl are pretty static. Maybe you could improve it with incorporating a line of action to get a more dynamic feeling? -
What pose looks more interesting for the Cowardly Lion?
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Is this one worth putting in my portfolio? (Once it’s done of course.)
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Hi!
Looks like you've made a great start on this!
I have a few opinions that you can take or leave:- Dorothy might be better smaller, to give a bit more contrast in size with the other main characters.
- I know these are just sketches, but just a reminder that, if one foot is behind the other, it should be higher on the page, unless it's a worms-eye view.
I think my favourite lion pose is the one where he's just lying there with a vacant expression, but that might not be dramatic enough... Otherwise I like the one like where he has his paws over his eyes.
In your latest sketch I think a smaller Dorothy would make it more dynamic. And maybe some more movement in all the characters.
I hope this helps!
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Cowardly Lion update:
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I think I figured out what the colors will be for the characters. What do you guys think?
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How does this look so far? I still need to do the background and lighting. So there may be some final detail changes to the characters left for the lighting part, but how does this look up close? Is the colored line art too much?
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@kayleenartlover Hi Kayleen. It looks like it's coming along nicely! And it's fun to see your process.
Since you still need to do the background and lighting I'm not sure how much of this will be changed - but, here are my thoughts:
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The yellow of the yellow brick road is very vibrant and it draws my eye away from the characters more than I think it should.
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Will you be adding more light and texture to the Toto the dog? He seems a bit dark and undeveloped.
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I like the movement you've given to the Scarecrow, but the highlights in his eyes (coupled with his face being straight on) make it appear that he is not looking at the lion.
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I'm not sure the reasoning behind the lighter green outline in the bush around the Scarecrow's head and lion's body. I would remove this and keep the darker bush color which will help to add more value contrast between the bush and characters.
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I'd go darker with the bushes in the foreground as though they are in shadow.
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Have you considered giving the Tin Man and Dorothy a little more movement to their poses? With them standing next to each other, both straight and feet together, it seems a bit stagnant given the meltdown that the Lion is having.
I hope this helps. Looking forward to seeing more!
Sara Therese
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I fixed the scarecrow eyes, and added to Dorothy and Tinman's facial expressions. The outline around the characters is just because I removed the sketch of them underneath so the rest of the sketch is on a multiply layer to temporarily show what the background could look like. I will be doing a shady dapple lighting over everything so most of the road will be darker. Unfortunately I can't really change the poses of the characters at this point. I've been posting for a while and never got suggestions on how to change the poses so now there is too many hours and detail put into it that I'd have to redo. My goal was to have the lion be uncharacteristically sobbing and the others being surprised and not sure how to respond yet. Do the facial expressions look better?
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@kayleenartlover Yes, I think the facial expression of the Tin Man is more expressive.
- about a month later
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Does this look finished for a portfolio?
