WIP help! Drawing just lacks a bit of…life.

Robyn Hepburn

@Sara-Therese-Art Ooh, I like the water-splashing idea!

AngelinaKizz

@allysa I think you could adjust the arc of the bubbles. Right now they're leading the eye right off the page, if the arc were to spiral downward, the fish could be brought forward and more focal, and the arc could draw the eye back into the girl keeping the viewer engaged longer.

mag

Hi! Your illustration is stunning, the colours and the rendering, beautiful!
I agree with others about the girls hair (should be moving along with the wind, not in the opposite direction), I would also alter the wave of bubbles, so it’s not so straightforward.
The girls posture is a bit stiff - I know this would mean a major redraw, but a piece this beautiful might be worth it!
My last nitpicking point - I’d adjust the girls eyes, when I blow bubbles, I always look right into the loop…

Keep up the good work!

Blitz55

Very pretty for sure.
It may have been said, but the girl seems a little disconnected with what she's doing. She is sort of looking off elsewhere away from the bubbles she's blowing, especially since one of those bubbles has a fish inside. I think if you were to change her eyeline to focus on the fish bubble that would help the viewers eye move through the image a bit more.

Maybe something with her legs as well, if you can come up with a pose.....okay, I'm just now seeing @mag response. So yeah, pretty much Mag's response.

allysa

Thank you everyone - this is all so helpful and I’m grateful for all of your time!!!

allysa

This looks awesome - thanks!!! @mag

allysa

@mag

So obviously the hair isn’t fully rendered & is just copied and pasted and scribbled in, but I’d love your thoughts on this version - which I updated based on your advice! I think it’s better…but possibly still not quite there?

Do you or anyone else have any other thoughts to improve?

Cheers! As always, I’m grateful!

ajillustrates

@allysa Love it!

Nyrryl Cadiz

@allysa hi! First off beautiful piece. To improve it, I think you can still push the girl’s pose but that’s it. I hope this helps.

allysa

Here’s the final. I’m sure I could push the pose more, but into the next thing. Appreciative of all the help!