does this work? composition and value... edit: back to the start! composition thumbnails
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I like the close up in #1 which would be fun to draw because you can get in there and really work on their expressions and character. I like #3 because that's just a such a fun shot of the mouse the way his legs are crossed and holding the paper. Number 11 would be fun because you can really go to town fleshing out the room that they are in. Those are my favorites anyway.
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I think you really did a great job on this Audrey! Great variation on your thumbnails (I really don't think they look too much alike!)
I don't know why but I really like #2. I like the gesture of her looking behind her shoulder at M Mouse. I know 14 came up a lot but it's a little like what Lee said about 2 circles in the middle of a page. I also like # 15.
Nice work!
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how about that?
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@audrey-dowling good job on the thumbnails. I think I like #9 too. your other choices are split in half or centered.
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@audrey-dowling I think it's really nice! However, the table is very far from him and it isn't clear that she is bringing the tea to him... But maybe if there was a table beside him and two cups of tea in her tray we would get that she has a cup of tea for him too!
I think the idea is really worth the work you are putting in! These characters are so cute, I really want to see the final version
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I love the new rough draft that you've posted. I do agree with @nowayme that it isn't clear what is happening in the picture so either moving the table and Mrs. Mouse or having two cups of tea could easily fix that.
So far this draft is a lot stronger than your first. I can't wait to see it progress. Great job.
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@audrey-dowling I love this one, it was my favorite too of the new ones! I liked your very 1st sketch as well! Nice work!!
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I tried something else, to avoid the "table too far" issue. It's also more simple value wise, it makes it more readable I think
I was afraid it would be unbalanced: are the big shape of the frame, the strong light value and the text enough to balance it out on the left?
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I like this last one, the door opening would be an opportunity to show some awesome mousey door with little carvings or something... I like it.
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@audrey-dowling Really great to see all of your process on this one - your thumbnails look great! - for me I like this last version a lot and your original version too - when skimming through the thread before I read it all I thought that Lee's thumbnails were yours also and I thought "oh, she cropped out the window on the second thumbnail...that looks perfect" I think too that I would love to see your original with the window cropped out and this new one with the door cropped out so that the steam was leading us into the picture - what ever you do will be good though I'm sure - I love your characters
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My favorite is the one posted three days ago with close up of Mrs. Mouse to the right carrying in tea. Your characters are so sweet
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now, I'm done with the values.
overall, much better than the 1st illustration, I think, I'm quite happy with it so far
let me know what you think please
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I love your art. Very good, clean, emotional... Now I want to know who is coming through the door. If the door is closed the two mice are the focal point...
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@Russ-Van-Dine the text will be in the door and Mrs Mouse came through this door. so I'm thinking it's a focal point that has a justification (+ lighting): the reader might read the text first, then look at the image and see the characters in the actual image
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@audrey-dowling Nice, hadn't thought of that... love the lamp!
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or maybe this would be better?
(God, I can't believe I'm changing it AGAIN!
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"delicous"...
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line and values done, hopefully for the last time!
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@audrey-dowling it's beautiful x
Magical, fairy tale art. Www.jacquelinewild.com
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thank you @jacs
