May Third Thursday - bouncing ideas
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@smceccarelli This is such a great drawing! For me i think there are things about number 6 that make it stand out - i keep wanting to move the clouds to the right for some reason on 1 through 5 - i think in 6 the contrast is lower between the clouds and the sky and there are clouds on the right hand side of the composition too which seems to lessen their importance on the left hand side of the composition (in a good way it think) - i like the suggestion that there is a cloud in the very upper left corner in number 6 also - i think that adds a lot to the composition for me - they are all very nice though and the things i like about 6 could be added to any of the other if they seemed important - looking forward to seeing the next step!
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Thank you all for your thoughtful feedback! I am doing six more, trying different color of sky. I am also thinking about adding a distinct sense of sunset, to suggest a sunny life evening - that would pick up on the warmer tones that everybody likes in 5. And definitely I need to do something with those clouds and changing the composition around. I will probably try to place the text on the left, as suggested, and put some clouds on the top right to balance it out.
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Your linework is so nice and its a fun idea. I like number 6 the best and I like your idea of trying out number 5 in new ways. What i like about number 6 is that the characters stand out as they are warm on a cold background. I wonder what it would look like combining 2's characters with 6's background?
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Absolutely fantastic work!
I like #5 too, but my favorite is # 6
Your work is very impressive (not just this piece!), you have very strong draftman skills!
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@NoWayMe Thank you - I did choose number 6 in the end, but I will add a sense of evening light raking through, which comes from more color thumbs I did later. I liked many others (including the yellow one!), but I think the sunny evening sky supports the story better.
Thank you for your positive feedback - this is by far the best compliment you can make for me
I have made a conscious choice two or three years ago that my main strengths as an artist would be drawing skills and the control of light and color. The road is still long and steep, but that is where I have been concentrating my training and practice, so this feedback makes me particularly happy - thank you!! -
@smceccarelli This is amazing! I love the drawing and all of your color ideas. Very well done.
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I love this concept! Nice work on the colors. I find #4 very attractive but for the message of that piece I would go for more "shouting" colors like red, orange, yellow, particularly for the vehicles, as in #2. #5 has very fun colors, but for me the attention is drawn too much to the background.
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So, finished - not perfect....
I changed the pose of the old guy, so that he takes up more space. Nobody of the people I asked noticed the Grim Reaper running away at the front (I had cropped it heavily), so I extended the canvas to draw it out nearly in full. And used the blank space on the left to position the text.
Too saturated?Feedback and suggestions are highly welcome!
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@smceccarelli This looks so great! i did notice the Grim Reaper in the original - i hope you don't mind me saying i thought it was perfect before - it is such a positive image - i really like the symbolism of the sun not hitting the wheelchair and Death but it does really changes the mood for me - i though the way you alluded to the Grim Reaper in the earlier version was just right - maybe if he was tipping his hat or otherwise engaged in a friendly act it would keep things positive - but all things do move to one great ending - i think too that before the focal point was in a really ideal spot on the page (the man surfing his wheelchair was focal for me) - The Grim Reaper has become part of the focal point adding a lot of visual weight to the right - maybe the text balances it out though - i really like that you have placed the fortune right on the image - it looks great - anyways... this painting looks awesome and really does not need any changes - just sharing some thoughts
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@Kevin-Longueil I think you are right, Kevin! I will play with the crop tomorrow and see if I can get the composition re-balanced. It is definitely unbalanced now.
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Really nice image @smceccarelli I have enjoyed looking at your whole process on this one.
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@smceccarelli wonderful! I love the color balance and the balance in comp! its fun and there's so much to see! Well done!
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It looks fantastic @smceccarelli, love it! I agree with @Kevin-Longueil about cropping the Grim Reaper, I did notice it in the original version too and thought that was just right...in the latest version it tilts the focus towards 'he's about to die!'...nevertheless I think it's a fantastic piece, it looked great from the sketch and beautifully finished...I like the way you've got the old man as focal point through the use of colour with the warmth hitting him, very nice
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Very nice;) Also agree about the reaper. There might be just a touch too much saturation. I think if you have all the blue light coming down from the sky your shadows would be on the blue side. I did a quick test ball to see what it would look like. I love what you did with the fortune. Overall it's a super great concept...might be a winner, great job.
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@smceccarelli This is awesome. There is a tangent though. The motorbike and the wheelchair in front connect making me look twice to see if there separate. Just thought I'd let you know. Great job though.
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Thank you everyone for the great and very spot-on feedback! I have re-cropped to exclude Death again, changed the clouds to guide the composition better, reduced contrast and saturation and cooled the shadows.
@Jason-Bowen, you are right with the tangent. It bugged me throughout painting, but changing it would have cost too much time. It will have to stay as a fault on this one. I have added a touch of rim-light to the chair, in an attempt to pull them apart, but with more time it would need a re-draw.
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That's AMAZING! I love the roller-coaster idea, and the colors are beautiful! I think the cropping is great, it all looks pretty good!
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@smceccarelli man what an ambitious illustration! Vehicles of all kinds and people of all ages...on a rollercoaster?! My hat's off to you!
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That's incredible! So cool!
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I love it too. And I am in complete awe of your amazing talent. However, the death guy is a little confusing. How would it look if you only had death's scythe showing perhaps? (moved it closer to old guy and cropped it a little closer?)
