May Third Thursday - bouncing ideas
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So, finished - not perfect....
I changed the pose of the old guy, so that he takes up more space. Nobody of the people I asked noticed the Grim Reaper running away at the front (I had cropped it heavily), so I extended the canvas to draw it out nearly in full. And used the blank space on the left to position the text.
Too saturated?Feedback and suggestions are highly welcome!
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@smceccarelli This looks so great! i did notice the Grim Reaper in the original - i hope you don't mind me saying i thought it was perfect before - it is such a positive image - i really like the symbolism of the sun not hitting the wheelchair and Death but it does really changes the mood for me - i though the way you alluded to the Grim Reaper in the earlier version was just right - maybe if he was tipping his hat or otherwise engaged in a friendly act it would keep things positive - but all things do move to one great ending - i think too that before the focal point was in a really ideal spot on the page (the man surfing his wheelchair was focal for me) - The Grim Reaper has become part of the focal point adding a lot of visual weight to the right - maybe the text balances it out though - i really like that you have placed the fortune right on the image - it looks great - anyways... this painting looks awesome and really does not need any changes - just sharing some thoughts
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@Kevin-Longueil I think you are right, Kevin! I will play with the crop tomorrow and see if I can get the composition re-balanced. It is definitely unbalanced now.
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Really nice image @smceccarelli I have enjoyed looking at your whole process on this one.
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@smceccarelli wonderful! I love the color balance and the balance in comp! its fun and there's so much to see! Well done!
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It looks fantastic @smceccarelli, love it! I agree with @Kevin-Longueil about cropping the Grim Reaper, I did notice it in the original version too and thought that was just right...in the latest version it tilts the focus towards 'he's about to die!'...nevertheless I think it's a fantastic piece, it looked great from the sketch and beautifully finished...I like the way you've got the old man as focal point through the use of colour with the warmth hitting him, very nice
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Very nice;) Also agree about the reaper. There might be just a touch too much saturation. I think if you have all the blue light coming down from the sky your shadows would be on the blue side. I did a quick test ball to see what it would look like. I love what you did with the fortune. Overall it's a super great concept...might be a winner, great job.
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@smceccarelli This is awesome. There is a tangent though. The motorbike and the wheelchair in front connect making me look twice to see if there separate. Just thought I'd let you know. Great job though.
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Thank you everyone for the great and very spot-on feedback! I have re-cropped to exclude Death again, changed the clouds to guide the composition better, reduced contrast and saturation and cooled the shadows.
@Jason-Bowen, you are right with the tangent. It bugged me throughout painting, but changing it would have cost too much time. It will have to stay as a fault on this one. I have added a touch of rim-light to the chair, in an attempt to pull them apart, but with more time it would need a re-draw.
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That's AMAZING! I love the roller-coaster idea, and the colors are beautiful! I think the cropping is great, it all looks pretty good!
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@smceccarelli man what an ambitious illustration! Vehicles of all kinds and people of all ages...on a rollercoaster?! My hat's off to you!
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That's incredible! So cool!
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I love it too. And I am in complete awe of your amazing talent. However, the death guy is a little confusing. How would it look if you only had death's scythe showing perhaps? (moved it closer to old guy and cropped it a little closer?)
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Mmmh, maybe Death was not a good idea after all.... I am also noticing a bad tangent with the wheel of the wheelchair and the border of the image. Well, now it is done and closed - next one is already in my mind and this one needs to rest!
Thank you everyone, for the positive encouragement as well as the useful critical feedback. I really feel like pieces posted here in the forum are the result of a collaborative creative act - it is a really nice feeling!
