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    • Katrina Fowler
      Katrina Fowler last edited by

      Older elf guys raised arm is a bit off. From shoulder to elbow it's too short looks forced too far back. The young elf's hands are HUGE and a bit distracting. But perhaps that's your style. Look forward to seeing the final work.

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      • smceccarelli
        smceccarelli Pro SVS OG @Katrina Fowler last edited by

        @Katrina-Fowler Spot-on,thank you! I will redraw that arm. The younger guy hand is a magic gauntlet that helps him to hold the sword - itΒ΄s part of the wacky story....

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        • Chris Perry
          Chris Perry @smceccarelli last edited by

          @smceccarelli I like the line work so far. Is there a reason for the giant hand?

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          • Chris Perry
            Chris Perry @smceccarelli last edited by

            @smceccarelli Could you give my work a look. I also did a line piece before I color it and would like to see what you think.

            Thank you
            Chris

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            • Chip Valecek
              Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG last edited by

              Love the characters! The old mans left leg looks to be off. It may just be the lines on the back of the knee cap, but it looks like his leg is twisted. Looks really cool and looking forward to seeing more.


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              • Lee Holland
                Lee Holland last edited by

                I think it's looking great so far And I do agree with Katrina about the arm. great work

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                • Dulcie
                  Dulcie SVS OG last edited by

                  This looks like it is going to be an exciting piece! I agree with @Chip-Valecek about the leg... it looks like the bottom part of the leg is having to twist to reach the rock. Will be good to see how this progresses πŸ™‚

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                  • smceccarelli
                    smceccarelli Pro SVS OG last edited by

                    So, corrected (I hope) arm and leg, though I am still not totally sure the anatomy is even remotely correct. I will probably need to get a ref photo for this one or do a quick skeleton in 3D and see how it holds together. This is already taking more time than I have to dedicate to it! Anyhow, some color/value studies. The wizard must have a dominant cool color according to the brief. Glad to hear your thoughts!

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                    • Christine Garner
                      Christine Garner last edited by

                      Looking great. I just think the wizard is a little close to the right picture edge though- don't know why exactly but its bothering me- perhaps add more space to the right and see what happens to the composition ? The colour studies really bring this to life, look forward to seeing what you go with.

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                      • evilrobot
                        evilrobot SVS OG last edited by

                        Really nice job. I think the very last color comp is working really well.

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                        • smceccarelli
                          smceccarelli Pro SVS OG last edited by

                          Here is where I am so far. I think I have actually missed the deadline - I have just been too busy with other stuff, and things are getting worse. Now, to finish or not to finish, that is the question. I am sort of in-between losing hope and seeing promise....
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                          • smceccarelli
                            smceccarelli Pro SVS OG last edited by

                            Ok, spent a few more hours on it today and I will call it quit - unless you notice something that really would help make it better!
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                            • NoWayMe
                              NoWayMe last edited by

                              I really like it! There is one thing that's bugging me though, and maybe I am wrong. I think the right leg look twisted... it looks like the right and left legs are crossed. I think it would look better with the right leg going in the opposite direction (i.e. we would see the inside of the boot). Also, I don't understand where is "sword" is going (through the cape ?) I can't really explain it better than this, but the relationship between the two legs and the sword is somewhat off... I think!

                              Other than that, great work!

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                              • Kevin Longueil
                                Kevin Longueil SVS OG @smceccarelli last edited by

                                @smceccarelli O.k. sorry to add my thoughts so late in the process but i agree with @NoWayMe on the legs - it is hard for me to tell if the leg closest to the right side of the canvas is the right leg or left leg - does that sound crazy? i think the angle of the bottom of that rock is really making it hard for my brain to decide if his torso is really very twisted and it is his right foot on the rock or if he is not so twisted at the waist and it is his left foot on the right hand rock.... feel like i am not making sense...the relationship between the staff and the cape and the rocks keeps bringing me back to it being his left foot being on the right hand side of the canvas...but then the rock under that foot is tilted so far forward it seems that it cannot be his left foot.... and there you have it πŸ™‚ That made no sense right? Anyways i love your work.

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                                • smceccarelli
                                  smceccarelli Pro SVS OG @NoWayMe last edited by

                                  @NoWayMe @Kevin-Longueil - you are both so right! I was really unhappy with this piece and so much in a rush. Shows you should stop and put aside art that you do not feel is working. And maybe come back to it later! Yes, I forgot to redraw the stab over the cape after painting it. And the anatomy is definitely not right, which is what bugs me most. I will let it rest for a few hours and see if I can at least correct the most evident things - and see what I learned out of what I consider a not-so-successful piece... Thank you so much for your feedback, which really nailed the problems!

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                                  • Cyd
                                    Cyd last edited by

                                    Wow, this illustration is so captivating! I adore the detail in the characters πŸ™‚

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