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    • Steve Young
      Steve Young last edited by

      Look forward to seeing you what you do 🙂

      Never give up, always push yourself two steps further than you believe you can go.

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      • Rob Smith
        Rob Smith last edited by

        This is a really detailed sketch! I too am looking forward to seeing the finished painting.

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        • Kimberli Johnson
          Kimberli Johnson last edited by

          You guys are so nice, I will post here as I go along!

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          • Kimberli Johnson
            Kimberli Johnson last edited by

            I just wanted to update you guyscrossbowpg1web.jpg

            here is the color for the first page.

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            • Steve Young
              Steve Young last edited by

              Wow you have done a excellent job. Great use of color.

              Never give up, always push yourself two steps further than you believe you can go.

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              • Naroth Kean
                Naroth Kean last edited by

                This is great I really like your color and drawing!

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                • Thrace
                  Thrace last edited by

                  Very nice work, has an "old timey" feel!

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                  • Kimberli Johnson
                    Kimberli Johnson last edited by

                    Thanks, I feel like I could really work on my painting skills, they never turn out how I want them to.

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                    • Rob Smith
                      Rob Smith last edited by

                      Yes...terrific! Your color choices and handling of the media are well done.

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                      • Rob Smith
                        Rob Smith last edited by

                        If I were to add one point of critique is was for me the crossbow in the first panel. I couldn't really tell what the character was holding at first. The bow seemed to get lost in the figure/clothing. In the second panel it is much clearer that the character is holding a weapon which clued me in to the fact that there was the crossbow in the first panel.

                        The dog is very well done!

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                          Shannon Perkins last edited by

                          Love the traditional medium and texture. I would suggest cleaning up the gutters and making them pure white. As is, it's hard to read the panels as 3 separate images.

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                          • Kimberli Johnson
                            Kimberli Johnson last edited by

                            Rob, do you think I need to tweak the value on the crossbow? would that help it stand out more?

                            Shannon, Thanks I see that now I will make those a little more defined in photoshop!

                            Thanks for your feed back very helpful!

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                            • Sarah LuAnn
                              Sarah LuAnn SVS OG last edited by

                              This looks so awesome! I would read this whole comic, you do beautiful work. One tiny thing--I don't quite see one of the eyes of the character in the first panel, and that may be why the gaze seems to be going off to the right rather than at what is being pointed at. I'm not sure if that was intentional, I just thought I'd point it out.

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                              • Vicky Vicky
                                Vicky Vicky last edited by

                                Ooh, nice! Love the style. Could there be a bit more variation in the clothing and dogs? I think for the person farthest away, the blue would be lighter.

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                                • Kimberli Johnson
                                  Kimberli Johnson last edited by

                                  here is the second page Huntercomicpg2.jpg

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                                  • Leontine
                                    Leontine @Kimberli Johnson last edited by

                                    @Kimberli-Johnson What lovely paintings you make Kimberli! Appealing and lively, but also easy to read. I Love it!

                                    Leontine
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                                    • Steve Young
                                      Steve Young last edited by

                                      Really great work, I thing digital retouching could really add a bit of polish to your images.

                                      Never give up, always push yourself two steps further than you believe you can go.

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                                      • Rob Smith
                                        Rob Smith last edited by

                                        I think the value of the cross bow arms and the characters hood are so close that I'm losing them. Take for example your second image (which is very well done!) the crossbow arms really stand out against the dark value of the green trees. Great work!

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                                        • Kimberli Johnson
                                          Kimberli Johnson last edited by

                                          Thanks for all the comments guys, I have been experimenting with different water color technique and I think I am finding something that works a bit better, I do feel that both of the above peices need some work but I feel this one is a little better Bilbocolor.jpg

                                          I watched this watercolour process by Cedric Babouche https://vimeo.com/124028606 (who in my opinion is a water color master) I am hoping to keep improving so one day I won't have to rely on digital touch ups. Thanks for the feed back it is alway s helpful!

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                                          • Ben J Hutchison
                                            Ben J Hutchison last edited by

                                            This is really great work. If you haven't checked out Lee's video on lighting yet I'd give it a watch. I am always fascinated with watching technique videos and he goes through his process of using watercolors. Very helpful!

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