Ixspen's Sketchbook

ixspen

Thank you very much, mattramsey!

When I posted my last piece, I forgot to upload the alterations I did to the camping picture after I had gotten some feedback on DeviantArt. I didn't move the lantern from the center, but I scaled it down and slid it back so it wasn't dominating the foreground. Still think I should scrap it?

Also, thank you for the help with the bowl. I wanted it to seem like the two were having a sleep over and staying up late. There's no written story tied to this piece, but I figured kids have snacks at sleepovers (?) (I never had one as a kid) so that's why I added it. I'll be sure to fix the angle.

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natiwata

@ixspen I think this could be a really nice piece but I think it needs a few changes to bring the focus in. The first thing that I would look at all the colors and the values. If you squint at this image your eye doesn't know where to go it just looks like a bunch of shapes there's no real focus to the composition. Part of that are your values you have some of the pillows are very light even the ones that move out from the center of the image, and the other thing is that there are bright eye-catching colors like orange or pink scattered around. If I were approaching this piece I would start with everything in shades of blue and then add color and light where I wanted the viewers I to go. Something else that might help ground some of the elements is that a central light like the lamp would cast shadows out around it from the bowl from the pillows the character those but also create lines I would point towards the center of the image and might help with focus.

I hope some of this helps!

ixspen

@natiwata

Everything you said was a lot of help! Thank you! :3
When I de-saturated it I see the issue with the values now..
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I started recoloring in shades of blue instead of gray and so far I think it does look a lot nicer. The shadows look more natural too. Thank you very much for that suggestion and the rest of your feedback!