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    • Johanne Nørgaard
      Johanne Nørgaard last edited by

      The concept for this one is a child that finds a magical crystal in the forest. I'm just a beginner looking to improve. Thanks!
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      • Nazuba
        Nazuba last edited by Nazuba

        Hi Will, I really appreciate you wanting to critique people on your spare time. Even though its a character on a white background, please see if you want to critique my image.
        This piece I did for a book of alphabets that is going to be published in the tribal languages (as a dictionary with Bengali and English) in the Chittagong hill tracts of Bangladesh. One image is Dragonfruit. So I made this illustration instead of just drawing a dragonfruit.

        My problems :
        I did pay a lot of attention to the composition which I think I struggle a lot with. Since this project is unpaid, I would really like to put it on my portfolio. But I don't really like my "go and render everything" style 😞 that's just what I learned when I picked up the tablet.

        I have a hard time adjusting to screen light. The image 1 is my first painting. When I posted it to instagram I saw it looked too dark and then I brightened it up (second version) And now my eyes are so blind I don't know what is wrong but I feel like something is missing and I cannot point out why.

        I do'nt mind being called out: I'm @nazubahere on instagram and Neeya Lutarruq on facebook

        image 1:0_1490992335917_dragonfruit.jpg
        Image 2:0_1490992390158_dragonfruit-bright.jpg

        I really appreciate your time.
        Nazuba

        https://www.dribbble.com/nazuba
        https://www.instagram.com/nazubahere/

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        • MOO
          MOO SVS OG last edited by

          Hi Will,
          Can you please add the link to your critiques to this first post so I can find it easily? I'm kind of techno challenged. Thanks!

          Marsha Ottum Owen

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          • MOO
            MOO SVS OG @Nazuba last edited by

            @Nazuba That is adorable! I love it.

            Marsha Ottum Owen

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            • Nazuba
              Nazuba @MOO last edited by

              @Marsha-Kay-Ottum-Owen Thank you Marsha! I actually did an initial sketch and thought it out which is something I am just starting to do. 🙂

              https://www.dribbble.com/nazuba
              https://www.instagram.com/nazubahere/

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              • Tyson Ranes
                Tyson Ranes @Nazuba last edited by

                @Nazuba really like the quality/sharpness of this rendering. The dress print looks great and the characters emotion really shows well.

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                • Nazuba
                  Nazuba @Tyson Ranes last edited by

                  @Tyson-Ranes Thank you! The dress is inspired by the traditional tribal dress of the Chittagong Hill tracts people so that the kids who read it can identify with it.

                  https://www.dribbble.com/nazuba
                  https://www.instagram.com/nazubahere/

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                  • Bob Crum
                    Bob Crum @will-terry-art last edited by

                    @will-terry-art I watch your channel all the time (even as I type this) - and I thought I would submit myself to your criticism.
                    My book has published but i think a second edition may merit some changes - at any rate, my last page in the book (SPOILER hahahah). If you have time or inclination, there it is.
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                    This started to remind me of your #draw50things challenge. This does not have 50 things and was not designed for that but I really want to do that (after i finish another book cover and a YA book - clients come first)

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                    • G
                      GeneG last edited by

                      Hi @will-terry-art

                      I recently discovered your channel via Jack Parker. Love your work!
                      I'd like to submit a piece I did for a weekly art blog I'm a part of, The Line it is Drawn on comicbookresorces .com. The artists of the blog do mash-ups and other art based on a theme of the week and people are encouraged to tweet in their suggestions. So this piece is from "Make a six-year-old a superhero" week. My entry, Splatter Punk, the perky, giggly monster hunter, was a time/style challenge for me as I"m really trying to up my game to get work done faster and still retain quality.

                      Thank you !


                      www.rltpress.com
                      twitter @rltpress
                      instagram @gbearpdx
                      facebook gene guilmette

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                      • Peter Jarvis
                        Peter Jarvis last edited by

                        After following @Will-Terry for over four years, I was inspired to become a children's book illustrator. I wrote a small story about my depression in 2012 and here is the new front/back cover for the book. I would love your feedback. I really want to get this right.
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                        • Bob Crum
                          Bob Crum @Nazuba last edited by

                          @Nazuba I may not be the illustrious Will Terry but I wanted to throw my two cents in on this one because I love it!

                          First off, I don't see a whole lot of difference between your images so I laid them on top of another and I see that your Image 2 is a little more saturated and a tad lighter. #2 is better that way because it will probably print nicer.

                          But then I got thinking about that red fruit... beautiful work there. It's just a shame that it matches her dress so closely that it disappears! I ran a quick look at the dress as if it were green (i dont know if those colors you have are culturally significant, so if they are... forgive me.) Since green is complimentary to red, I chose it and it works! Just an idea.

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                          Thanks for letting me mess around with your stuff. I really like the piece.

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                          • Tyson Ranes
                            Tyson Ranes @Bob Crum last edited by

                            u do bring the "the illustrious" tho @Bob-Crum

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                            • Sami K
                              Sami K last edited by Sami K

                              Hi Will, your work inspired me, after 30 days of being a student at SVS, i did my first complete digital painting and i hope you will give me some critiques.

                              the concept is kinda simple, three teenage friends like to gather at the elephant basement and hang out all the time, however this time the movie is way more scarier than expected, i was trying to capture the reactions under the influence of a scary dark night.
                              thank you.
                              0_1492270617685_GGG-Recovered.jpg

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                              • Will Terry
                                Will Terry @Sami K last edited by

                                @Sami-K I just uploaded my 3rd critique video! You can check it out here - I hope my comments are helpful for anyone watching. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ak_I15yFDeU

                                SVS Instructor
                                http://willterry.com/

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                                • Jeanne.M.Bowman
                                  Jeanne.M.Bowman last edited by

                                  Hi Will. Thank you so much for doing this. I am learning lots from everyone's critiques! You can this image if you would like. My name is Jeanne Bowman and my website is jeannebowman.weebly.com and my instagram isinstagram.com/jeanneillustrates/ This is for a picture book I have finished up to the dummy stage about a witch who chases a little girl. Baba Yaga and Vasilssa if you want to know who is who. I am worried mostly about being too "old fashioned" to get much picture book work at the moment.

                                  Thanks again! 0_1494430770354_jeannebowmanbabariver.jpg

                                  instagram.com/jeanneillustrates
                                  jeannebowmanillustrates.com

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                                  • DanetteDraws
                                    DanetteDraws last edited by

                                    Hi @Will-Terry, thank you so very much for doing these for us! I watch and love all your videos.
                                    If you would like to critique my piece I'd appreciate it a great deal!
                                    This is for a book dummy project of mine. It's a double-page spread for a small book (fits into a Christmas stocking) that's more tall than it is wide.
                                    I know for sure that the perspective is off but I don't know how to fix it. I can't even tell if it's just one or both the circular conveyor belt and/or Hollie (the pinkish red head who's standing).
                                    Thank you so much!
                                    https://danettebyatt.com
                                    Instagram @DanetteDraws
                                    Twitter @DanetteDraws
                                    ![0_1494432090717_StockingStuffers_8-9.jpg](Uploading 100%) 0_1494432113560_StockingStuffers_8-9.jpg

                                    https://danettebyatt.com
                                    Twitter @DanetteDraws
                                    Instagram @DanetteDraws

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                                    • Calvin Tony Shrumpish
                                      Calvin Tony Shrumpish last edited by Calvin Tony Shrumpish

                                      Did these drawings after finishing the course "Painting light and shadow", need constructive comments! 🙂

                                      my ig is: https://www.instagram.com/shrumpishdoodle/

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                                      • Sami K
                                        Sami K @Will Terry last edited by

                                        @Will-Terry Thank you so much Will it's a honor, i watched it like million times XD and i am trying to follow all the advises you mentioned and trying to apply them on my next piece thank you again 🙂

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                                        • Will Terry
                                          Will Terry @Sami K last edited by

                                          @Sami-K You're very welcome - thank you for letting me try 🙂

                                          SVS Instructor
                                          http://willterry.com/

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                                          • lmrush
                                            lmrush Pro SVS OG last edited by

                                            Hi Will, here is the piece we chatted about on twitter. Thanks so much!
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                                            Lisa Rush
                                            www.lisarushgallery.com
                                            www.facebook.com/ArtbyLisaRush/
                                            www.instagram.com/lisarush11/

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