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    • Kevin Longueil
      Kevin Longueil SVS OG @evilrobot last edited by

      @evilrobot Hey William this is looking great! I'm not sure if you are looking for feedback yet but i have a bit of feedback that i am unsure of myself - there is something about the perspective tat feel off to me - things i've come up with as to why this might be are - possibly your 3rd point in this three point perspective is not centered to the canvas an it is giving it a distorted look ..it looks like it may be centered above the boy - possibly the 3rd point is too close to the top of the frame - our viewpoint is high but this perspective with the third point high implies a worms eye view - if i make a line from the top of the store clerk's head over to the doors following what i believe is the laid out perspective the clerk is slightly taller than the door - i think the fluid in the bottle closest to the bottom edge of the canvas is showing a different ground plane than the one the boy is standing on......the surface of the fluid and the cap should maybe be more parallel to the surface of the shelf with the cake on it?.... i'm sorry about all of these disjointed thoughts - i'm just trying to articulate what it might be that feels off not necessarily what is off - anyways .. you know i love your work and this is way cooler than anything i could pull off - feel free to ignore - it is looking awesome really.

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      • evilrobot
        evilrobot SVS OG last edited by evilrobot

        Thanks for the feedback @Kevin-Longueil. You're right I do have a strange angled third point. Yeah, there is some stuff off mainly due to I had a layer with my perspective grid and I deleted it by mistake and then saved over it. So, I tried to recreate the grid but I'm off a bit. So, the first part was drawn with one grid and the second with one that is slightly off and it's giving me problems. The perspective on this piece is killing me...lol...I was going to use 3d and make it perfect but, decided I wanted to do it by hand. (Since it's a personal project if it was for a client I would have used 3d to lay it out for sure) I'm hoping a few tweaks here and there in Photoshop and resizing a few things will make it passable. The barrels and the popcorn machine I know have some scale issues as well in relation to the characters. Thanks for the feedback always welcome and appreciated.

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        • drawingmelee
          drawingmelee last edited by

          O wow, this looks amazing!

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          • Stephanie Hider
            Stephanie Hider last edited by

            Really like what you have done so far love the foreground!

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            • evilrobot
              evilrobot SVS OG last edited by

              Well took me long enough but I finished the line drawing for this. Had to put it away for awhile. 0_1494489907333_50-things-line-finished.jpg

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              • aska
                aska @evilrobot last edited by

                @evilrobot It looks great and it will take me years to draw like that. Wow...:-) However it seems to me, that the gum ball could be smaller. Unless its a really enormous object.

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                • evilrobot
                  evilrobot SVS OG last edited by

                  And one more work in progress for the night don't know if I'll keep the warm color for the shadows or go cooler. 0_1494497479729_50-things-WIP-color.jpg

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                  • Charlie Eve Ryan
                    Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG last edited by

                    Love it!

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                    • Tyson Ranes
                      Tyson Ranes @evilrobot last edited by

                      @evilrobot awesome work

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                      • Jon Anderson
                        Jon Anderson SVS OG last edited by

                        This is looking great! It may just be me, but the tile lines on the floor seem a bit off. They work well with the boy but feel off when looking at the popcorn stand and the shelves behind the boy. I like the direction and look forward to seeing more!

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                        • evilrobot
                          evilrobot SVS OG last edited by

                          Think I'm calling it finished now 0_1495093687943_50-things-finished.jpg

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                          • NoWayMe
                            NoWayMe @evilrobot last edited by

                            @evilrobot Very good work!!! I think you nailed it! The only thing that is bugging me is what @Sarah-LuAnn pointed out... I think you are loosing a lot of storytelling by just having the guy standing there. Maybe he could be looking at his watch, exasperated that the boy is taking so long to decide what he wants ? Otherwise, great work!

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                            • aska
                              aska last edited by

                              Sweet:-) I feel like eating some candy now 😉

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                              • Jeanne.M.Bowman
                                Jeanne.M.Bowman last edited by

                                All I have to say is that this is A M A Z I N G. Such great work!

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                                • Jake Parker
                                  Jake Parker SVS OG last edited by

                                  Solid work! @Will-Terry should be proud.

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                                  • Kevin Longueil
                                    Kevin Longueil SVS OG @evilrobot last edited by

                                    @evilrobot Really nice work William!!

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                                    • Randy Smith
                                      Randy Smith last edited by

                                      Really nice work. I love how you placed the main character in a pool of light. Good job!

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                                      • Eric Castleman
                                        Eric Castleman @evilrobot last edited by

                                        @evilrobot this is really good!!! High level skill 😉

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                                        • Lee White
                                          Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG last edited by

                                          great looking scene here. Good looking line work and detail. One thing though, your 3rd vanishing point lines are all over the place. Make sure that 3rd point is far away and make sure everything goes to that point. Right now everything is drawn so well that the angles on that are really throwing it off.

                                          Can't wait to see this finished! 0_1495214404019_1488663012060-50-things_-wip-3.jpg

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