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      aska @Jeanne.M.Bowman last edited by

      @JeaneBean thanks a lot!:) although iam an early stage amateur, i like challenges;) also i was very much into photography, which makes me look for interesting angles. Unfortunately, i need to deliver this pic today, so probably just gonna darken the elephant or smth, to bring the girl more out.

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        aska @DOTTYP last edited by

        @DOTTYP thank you:) how is your mood today? Ive read you were feeling down recently 😞

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          DOTTYP @aska last edited by

          @aska it is very kind of you to ask about my mood,I am ok just some family problems getting me down,cant see any solutions so i will just have to get on with it. Thanks for asking.

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            aska @DOTTYP last edited by

            @DOTTYP sorry to hear:( i didnt have great family time this year neither.. take care

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              Kat SVS OG last edited by

              Pretty cool angle! I wonder if it would read better if the trunk of the elephant wasn't so segmented. At first I was thinking it was a robot arm. I like the texture you have, too.

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                aska @Kat last edited by

                @Kat thanks;) i did think myself that it looked a bit like a hover's pipe;)

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                  Kat SVS OG @aska last edited by

                  @aska said in how does it look?:

                  @Kat thanks;) i did think myself that it looked a bit like a hover's pipe;)

                  😊

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                    MOO SVS OG @aska last edited by

                    @aska The elephant is a bit hard to tell what it is at first. The little girl , the elephant and teh clock seem to be on a different perspective angles. Coloring and shrinking do help. I can never see a whole picture on my laptop screen and it makes it hard to really get the full perspective on a composition. The colors are nice. I still have a lot to learn so, I may be wrong!

                    Marsha Ottum Owen

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                      Tyler Hallstrom last edited by

                      This is certainly an ambitious pose for a composition, but there are a few adjustments I would make. First, I would focus only on the elephant and the child, the other characters are a compositional and color distraction from the main source of action. Second, I really like the rendering of the elephant, and I think if you changed the camera angle to point downward slightly you would be able to showcase that even further. Lastly, I think that the bench is a little confusing. I would maybe consider a different way to showcase the size relationship between the elephant and the child.

                      Keep up the good work!

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                        aska last edited by

                        Thank you for your comments @Marsha-Kay-Ottum-Owen and @Tyler-Hallstrom 🙂

                        The picture is an illustration to a short story. In this story a little girl with her teddy bear appear in a weird place, where they meet blue elephant sitting next to a crocked clock. Perhaps reading the story changes the way that you look at the picture. What do you think?

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                          MOO SVS OG @aska last edited by

                          @aska Well, it might! Especially the crooked clock in a weird place. That would eb cause for some weird angles, etc.

                          Marsha Ottum Owen

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                            Tyler Hallstrom @aska last edited by

                            @aska I think that any image that helps serve the story is worth pursuing. If you are planning on having a multitude of images with extreme perspectives it might help to make a little mock-up version where you can layout all of your compositions so that you are able to cover everything. Cool idea for a story for sure!

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