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    • J
      Jason last edited by

      THis is very cool and very fast. Can't wait to see this finished.

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      • TessaW
        TessaW last edited by

        Hah. If a cat doesn't represent "independent", I don't know what else does. 🙂 Love it! Hope I can be as fast and expressive as you one day.

        Website: www.tessawrathall.com

        Instagram: www.instagram.com/tessawrathall_art/

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        • Wendy Plybon
          Wendy Plybon @Jose Ramos last edited by

          @jose-ramos Very cute! I think it portrays the theme quite well. 😊

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          • Jose Ramos
            Jose Ramos last edited by Jose Ramos

            Hey guys, what you think, I´ve had a freetime today. 🙂
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              smithdraws @Jose Ramos last edited by

              @jose-ramos You draw and paint at break-neck speed!

              https://www.instagram.com/joshuasmithdraws/?hl=en

              Twitter handle: @smittyjosh

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              • bnewman
                bnewman last edited by

                I love this. Fantastic work and very fast.

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                • Jose Ramos
                  Jose Ramos last edited by

                  Thanks guys, well it has not been so fast, it took me about 3 or 4 hours. 😞

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                  • Jose Ramos
                    Jose Ramos last edited by Jose Ramos

                    What do you think about to add a garland in the cat´s mouth?, does it make sense?
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                    • smceccarelli
                      smceccarelli Pro SVS OG last edited by

                      Really lovely concept and super execution! The cat feels slightly off-kilter - like he was getting down the stairs at an angle rather than walking straight down - but that is super nitpick.
                      While I love your signature, placing your signature so prominently on an image is possibly disturbing - especially if your goal is book illustration. Will Terry's practice/recommendation is to put instead his web address in a very unintrusive part of the illustration and barely visible.

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                      • Jose Ramos
                        Jose Ramos last edited by

                        Thanks Smceccarelli!, Nice nitpick, I really appreciate the comment.
                        The next illustration, I´ll follow your advice and I´ll put my web address more small, in unintrusive part and barely visible. 😉

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                        • Chip Valecek
                          Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG last edited by

                          4 hours to paint?!?!?! I would have just got that cat done in that timeframe LOL. Its a great piece. I would remove the flags, I liked it better without. Since there are no other reference to 4th of July in the image.


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                          • TessaW
                            TessaW last edited by

                            Wowzers! 3-4 hours is really fast, in my opinion. I agree with @Chip-Valecek on the garland. I think it's a cute idea, but I would either remove the garland, or add more elements to suggest that it's the 4th of July.

                            Website: www.tessawrathall.com

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                            • Christine Garner
                              Christine Garner last edited by

                              Looks good. Only a suggestion but perhaps try to make the cat stand out more if it's supposed to be the focal point. My eye gets drawn to the girl because she is in the light and the cat is a little bit hard to make out at first against the background because it looks similar in values to the grass.

                              website: https://thimblefolio.com

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                              • Jose Ramos
                                Jose Ramos last edited by

                                Hey guys, thanks so much for the coments, I´ve take out the garland, reduced the signature, and I moved the girl a little to the left.
                                About the cat, I played with the levels, so I think now it´s more visible.

                                Thanks for all! 😉

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                                  pn last edited by

                                  This is the first vision and purest form of 'independent' for me. Everyone has a child within us and I imagine her to be like this. CareFree. Independent. Happy.
                                  (Critiques are welcome. )

                                  (I assume this is the thread for WIP of the July month contest, 'independent ' )

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                                  • tombarrettillo
                                    tombarrettillo @Jose Ramos last edited by

                                    @jose-ramos Coming in a bit late, but I have been watching this one develop. Over all I think it is great. A couple things I see: Is the girl supposed to be looking at the cat? Maybe move the left eye so the girl's gaze move more towards the cat. Also, since the cat does not seem to care that she is calling, perhaps "move ahead in time" and make the girls expression a bit more annoyed/frustrated (using both hand around her mouth). Also, the ladder indicates that the light is coming from the right, but the cat and girl show the light behind them.

                                    https://www.youtube.com/@tombarrettart

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                                    • tombarrettillo
                                      tombarrettillo @pn last edited by

                                      @pn Best practice is to start your own thread for feedback. Only the finals are posted together in the contest thread.

                                      https://www.youtube.com/@tombarrettart

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                                        linhb last edited by

                                        so nice lah

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                                        • Jose Ramos
                                          Jose Ramos @tombarrettillo last edited by Jose Ramos

                                          @tombarrettillo Good points of view Tomb...
                                          I´ve uploaded the final version in the post, but I´d like to know what do you think about it.
                                          I´ve made the stair more dark, so the light is coming from the left, and I´ve made the girl more frustrated and with her hand around the mouth.
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                                          • lmrush
                                            lmrush Pro SVS OG @Jose Ramos last edited by

                                            @jose-ramos Your composition and rendering is awesome!

                                            Lisa Rush
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