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    feedback on this piece pls!!!

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    • TessaW
      TessaW last edited by

      Hope you don't mind that I did a quick paint over. I thought that you could add a little more contrast with value and color. I would also suggest rendering the elephant and dog in the same way. Right now the elephant has linework and the dog doesn't I would think about keeping them consistent.

      My phone makes my artwork darker as well. As far as what courses I would recommend here on SVS for lighting, the light and shadow course is a good one to start out with.

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      Website: www.tessawrathall.com

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      • MissMarck
        MissMarck last edited by

        It's a nice start!
        It does look dark to me. Something that I used to do was change the image to black and white, and then check for pure black, pure white, and three distinct shades of gray. That helped me see when my images were too much in the middle/dull area without enough contrast.
        Throw in some bold highlights and you'll see a big difference!
        0_1498948013060_2168D9EA-A38F-4FF7-927D-14BCC6D12D37-259-0000001517DA9931.jpeg

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        • Divya S Kumar
          Divya S Kumar @TessaW last edited by

          @tessw woah..thanks a lot tess !!...the elephant is mafia head and he trying to capture the puppy with the gun..the gun is actually a net gun..it throws out net :P...really appreciate the do over!!!!!thank you so much for taking your time!!! :):)...

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          • Divya S Kumar
            Divya S Kumar @MissMarck last edited by

            @missmarck ohh okok...i ll try that...so my darks aren't dark right...and there is no strong highlights...hmmm..ok...thanks so much..!!!

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            • Divya S Kumar
              Divya S Kumar @TessaW last edited by

              @tessw i was confused about the cast shadow...thanks so much how showing me your way 🙂

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              • Washu
                Washu SVS OG @Divya S Kumar last edited by

                @divya-s-kumar You're welcome. I recommend the Color and Light class by Ty Carter and Lighting for Storytelling with Zac Retz. I also (personally) enjoy the Marco Bucci videos Digital Painting 1&2 classes. Bucci shows how to blend greys with slightly more saturated colors to show bright light and glowing scenes.

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                  smithdraws last edited by

                  The elephant is from the mafia, so is he wearing a suit? For me it reads as a robe. Take a look at the puppy's right ear as it appears to be longer than his left ear. What if the net had already launched from the gun, that way we know for sure it's not a bazooka? And maybe the puppy could be actively trying to run away? Thanks for posting your WIP 🙂

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                  • Divya S Kumar
                    Divya S Kumar @Washu last edited by

                    @washu said in feedback on this piece pls!!!:

                    Bucci shows how to blend greys with slightly more saturated colors to show bright light and glowing scenes.

                    thanks washu!!! 🙂 will check that out 🙂

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                    • Divya S Kumar
                      Divya S Kumar @smithdraws last edited by

                      @smithdraws yeaa...i had the net coming out but later on removed it...it didn't come out well but will try again and see...yeaa..the elephant had a shirt as well..inside but then the gun covered it ...but i could show pants below...and some part of the shirt i guess...true the ears are a bit off...thanks a lot smith...will do a better job next time!!really appreciate your feedback 🙂

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                        linhb last edited by

                        nice style man

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                        • Will Terry
                          Will Terry @Divya S Kumar last edited by

                          @divya-s-kumar There are some really fun things happening in your drawing...just remember that before we can really work on painting and lighting we have to get the drawing working mechanically so we can tell a clear story. Thank you for posting this! 0_1499441677834_45645645SM.jpg

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                          • Divya S Kumar
                            Divya S Kumar @Will Terry last edited by

                            @will-terry thank you so much will 🙂 ....didnt expect to get feedback from you...thanks for the valuable points!!!..yaaa..i too wanted the hands of the elephant to fit into the gun but it felt awkward when i did...thanks once again 🙂

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                            • Divya S Kumar
                              Divya S Kumar @linhb last edited by

                              @linhb thanks you 🙂

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                              • routhledge
                                routhledge last edited by

                                very cool)

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                                • Divya S Kumar
                                  Divya S Kumar @routhledge last edited by

                                  @routhledge thank you _/_

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