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    • tombarrettillo
      tombarrettillo @Jose Ramos last edited by

      @jose-ramos Coming in a bit late, but I have been watching this one develop. Over all I think it is great. A couple things I see: Is the girl supposed to be looking at the cat? Maybe move the left eye so the girl's gaze move more towards the cat. Also, since the cat does not seem to care that she is calling, perhaps "move ahead in time" and make the girls expression a bit more annoyed/frustrated (using both hand around her mouth). Also, the ladder indicates that the light is coming from the right, but the cat and girl show the light behind them.

      https://www.youtube.com/@tombarrettart

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      • tombarrettillo
        tombarrettillo @pn last edited by

        @pn Best practice is to start your own thread for feedback. Only the finals are posted together in the contest thread.

        https://www.youtube.com/@tombarrettart

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          linhb last edited by

          so nice lah

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          • Jose Ramos
            Jose Ramos @tombarrettillo last edited by Jose Ramos

            @tombarrettillo Good points of view Tomb...
            I´ve uploaded the final version in the post, but I´d like to know what do you think about it.
            I´ve made the stair more dark, so the light is coming from the left, and I´ve made the girl more frustrated and with her hand around the mouth.
            0_1499280652471_Independent4.jpg

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            • lmrush
              lmrush Pro SVS OG @Jose Ramos last edited by

              @jose-ramos Your composition and rendering is awesome!

              Lisa Rush
              www.lisarushgallery.com
              www.facebook.com/ArtbyLisaRush/
              www.instagram.com/lisarush11/

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              • Jose Ramos
                Jose Ramos @lmrush last edited by

                @lmrush Thanks so much!

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                • tombarrettillo
                  tombarrettillo last edited by

                  I know you posted the final, but I was thinking about this illo the other night, and if you feel compelled, it might actually work better if her stance was of utter frustration: arms straight down, her leaning forward, and yelling at the cat. Since she is fairly close tot he cat, her yelling with cupped hands seemed a bit out of place. Just a thought...

                  https://www.youtube.com/@tombarrettart

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                  • Jose Ramos
                    Jose Ramos last edited by

                    Oh man, you kill me, ha ha ha...yes, I see your point of view, something like when your mom is calling you and you don´t care, and ignore her. 🙂

                    I changed it just for fun, but I think I gonna let the previous one.

                    Thanks Tom!

                    0_1499448509434_Independent0.jpg

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                    • ambiirae
                      ambiirae @Jose Ramos last edited by

                      @jose-ramos you are crazy fast at this! What kind of equipment do you use?

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                      • CC_art
                        CC_art last edited by

                        LOVE IT! Specially the way the little girl's hair is done.

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                        • tombarrettillo
                          tombarrettillo @Jose Ramos last edited by

                          @jose-ramos perfect! This is even better. : )

                          https://www.youtube.com/@tombarrettart

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                          • Jose Ramos
                            Jose Ramos @tombarrettillo last edited by

                            @tombarrettillo Your welcome Tomb!... 😉

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                            • Jose Ramos
                              Jose Ramos @ambiirae last edited by

                              @ambiirae Hi Ambiirae... Well, my equipment is a graphic tablet Wacom Cintiq 24HD, Imac 27" and Photoshop CC2017.
                              I use to work with diferent layers for each element of the illustration... background, characters, main character, foreground, so if I have to change something, it´s more easy.

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                              • Laurie
                                Laurie last edited by

                                @Jose-Ramos This illustration works really great in making you feel as if you are observing it right there... great job at making the viewer feel like they are in the pic with your use of colors, lights and darks and perspective!!! Love the little girl, she reminds me of my bossy little chickadee daughter.....

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                                • Jose Ramos
                                  Jose Ramos @Laurie last edited by

                                  @laurie Thanks so much Laurie!, I´d like to know your chickadee daughter, my daughter is 4 years, and she´s like the girl on the pic.. 🙂

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