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    • WithLinesOfInk
      WithLinesOfInk last edited by

      I think that all depends on the story of the piece. Right now it feels like the TV should get the most attention, but there isn't much a payoff in that. So what emotion do you want the viewer to feel? Whose story is this? Who's the leader of the group? I think if you don't have an answer, picking one can help out. For instance, the "group leader" may be telling the others to be quiet, or pointing out the screen. The active moment JUST before everyone is engaged is often the more interesting moment, and can help lead the eye a bit. We're drawn to action first. Just some ideas!

      This Shaun Tan Image and This one were the closest examples I could find.

      http://Www.lauraslaterillustrations.com
      https://www.instagram.com/withlinesofink/
      http://lauraslatersketches.tumblr.com/

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      • WithLinesOfInk
        WithLinesOfInk last edited by WithLinesOfInk

        A quick fix is that I bumped the background down in value, and then added some light from the TV in varying degrees of intensity to some faces, making the center point (boxhat kid) the highest contrast. If she's not the center of attention, maybe move her away from the midpoint of the composition and throw more contrast on someone else instead. πŸ™‚

        0_1500485861100_Lighting.jpg

        http://Www.lauraslaterillustrations.com
        https://www.instagram.com/withlinesofink/
        http://lauraslatersketches.tumblr.com/

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        • Jose Ramos
          Jose Ramos @TessaW last edited by

          @tessw Wow, itΒ΄s amazing!, congrats! πŸ˜‰

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          • Chip Valecek
            Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @TessaW last edited by

            @tessw I feel like the perspective on the couch is off a little. Unless the leg of the couch by the girl in pink is broken. It just feels to slant down a little to much. Fun piece I would like to know what is on TV.


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            • Tyson Ranes
              Tyson Ranes @TessaW last edited by Tyson Ranes

              @tessw Love this idea! Maybe a little more light bleed from crack in the drapes and cracked door, slight cast shadows on the suction cup arrows, and maybe tiny luminous light from TV. Great stuff. Yeehaw !

              (edit)> Just saw the luminous light from the TV ,maybe play with different color on that frizzunt tho - Yippy!

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              • Russ Van Dine
                Russ Van Dine last edited by

                I might tone down the pink rug and put some light rays coming from the tv. The bright yellow on the table the tv is on will draw the eye there and the light rays will push the eye back into the painting...

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                • TessaW
                  TessaW last edited by

                  Thanks everyone! I didn't really intend for one kid to be a main character, though the kid with the box on her head is what kicked this painting off, as I looked over at my daughter recently while I was working on something and she had that box helmet on her head, but was totally engrossed in watching tv.

                  I think the main feeling I'm working from is how engrossed kids can become when watching tv- but I want that to be shown in a positive light, because they know how to live in the moment and are still so fascinated by things. So I kind of envisioned this crazy scene happening, and then maybe a parent came along and turned on the tv, because they knew it would stop the kids in their tracks and maybe they could get a little peace. I did think of the idea of inserting a parent in the scene, maybe showing them in the foreground with the remote, or on the couch there, maybe getting some rest finally, or being totally engrossed by the tv too, but I kind of thought that would make it be about the parent's perspective, instead of the kids.

                  I did play with the idea of having a more dramatic lighting scheme, but I felt that maybe it made the idea a little more sinister, like the tv is more of a negative hypnotising experience? What do you think?

                  Anyway, thanks a ton for all the suggestions and things you guys noticed. I'm going to put this away for a few days, and then come at it with fresh eyes and your suggestions in mind.

                  Website: www.tessawrathall.com

                  Instagram: www.instagram.com/tessawrathall_art/

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                  • Tyson Ranes
                    Tyson Ranes @TessaW last edited by

                    @tessw I think you could over play the tv and it would have the negative hipno effect for sure. I like the piece as is I just see tiny tweaks with the cast shadows I mentioned previous and the other minor lighting tweaks also mentioned. I agree with your direction on it and your concern for over dramatized lighting and shadow.

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                    • TessaW
                      TessaW last edited by TessaW

                      Ok, I worked on it a bit more. Hopefully you can tell the difference. . . and hopefully it's improved somewhat! I feel stretched to my skill-capacity!

                      Here's the last version posted:

                      0_1500938309680_Tv-Watchers-backup.jpg

                      Here's the updated:

                      0_1500939042605_Tv-Watchers-revised.jpg

                      Edited- Changed out the photo, because I forgot to fix the couch, as @Chip-Valecek suggested.

                      Website: www.tessawrathall.com

                      Instagram: www.instagram.com/tessawrathall_art/

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                      • WithLinesOfInk
                        WithLinesOfInk last edited by

                        Awesome, this is great!

                        http://Www.lauraslaterillustrations.com
                        https://www.instagram.com/withlinesofink/
                        http://lauraslatersketches.tumblr.com/

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                        • Katrina Fowler
                          Katrina Fowler last edited by

                          This image is really great! I especially love wonder woman riding a stegosaurus. Awesome job!

                          "Never give up! Never surrender!" ~Commander Peter Quincy Taggert

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                          • Jason Bowen
                            Jason Bowen SVS OG @TessaW last edited by

                            @tessw You should post this image on social media and say can you find wonder woman in this picture. πŸ˜‰

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                            • mattramsey
                              mattramsey last edited by

                              really great!

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                              • TessaW
                                TessaW last edited by

                                Thanks everyone! And that's a really good idea, @Jason-Bowen.

                                Website: www.tessawrathall.com

                                Instagram: www.instagram.com/tessawrathall_art/

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                                • Jose Ramos
                                  Jose Ramos @TessaW last edited by

                                  @tessw Your last updated is great! πŸ˜‰

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                                  • Will Terry
                                    Will Terry @TessaW last edited by

                                    @tessw Hi Tess - this is such a fun piece! It's really professional too. I did a minor paint over to show how I would color the rug. To me - it's stealing from your accent colors a little. I neutralized the colors a little on the rug. This isn't a right or wrong thing - just an opinion. Great work!0_1501175047592_4676757665.jpg

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