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    • j.sienkowski
      j.sienkowski last edited by

      Hey all! I was hoping to get some feedback on my Transportation illustration.

      The one thing in particular that I'm questioning is that the beam from the duck's head is leaving and returning to the page...should I tilt his down so it doesn't go towards the edge?

      Any feed back is greatly appreciated. Thanks for the help!

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      • tombarrettillo
        tombarrettillo last edited by tombarrettillo

        Yes, bring the main duck's head down a bit, and lower him more to the bottom edge, but I think the best thing you can do is make the beams straight. I looks odd having them curved.

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        • Lynn Larson
          Lynn Larson SVS OG last edited by

          I agree with @tombarrettillo ...I thought the airplane was bouncing off the duck lol

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          • Nyrryl  Cadiz
            Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

            This is really FUN! I absolutely like your concept. You could increase the contrast for the duck which is at the fore front and probably make the background brighter as it goes further.

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