Children's book illustration feedback

[rcartwright]

I really like the style of illustration, I would lighten or remove the line in the background grave area as they seem to be the same weight as things up closer. You probably only need the shapes with the correct value to separate them from the sky

[Doodleworx]

I like your style and characters!

[TessaW]

Hi jallot- what a great image! You really have great skills in making appealing characters. I was wondering if adding a vignette might help with the focal point of the illustration?

[jallott]

@rcartwright Thanks, that's a great call!

[jallott]

@doodleworx Thank you!

[jallott]

@tessw Hi! Thanks a lot I'll certainly give it a try with a vignette and see how it comes out

[jallott]

Thanks for the feedback so far everyone! I've just been working on some alternate designs for the ghost, trying to take onboard everyones comments and give it a bit more character!

[jallott]

I've been playing around with this a bit more this week and finally come up with something that I think works a little better. I've updated the ghost, faded out the background line work, added some stars and a slight gradient and slightly moved some bits around. I've added text in just to make sure everything fitting right. Any critiques would be greatly appreciated! Thanks!

[Chip Valecek]

@jallott i really like your ghost in this version. My critique is that it looks like he is looking at the ground vs the creature on the tombstone. Maybe tilt him up a little.

[jallott]

@chip-valecek thanks! I totally see what you mean about the ghost looking down. Thanks for the feedback!

[jallott]

Hey everyone, I've done a few more little tweaks to the ghost image and think I'm going to call it done on that one resists strong urge to go back and keep editing it till the end of time. I've also been rendering another few of pages from the book- On the "wheeze" page, looking at it now, I think it would have been better to have him looking like he's actually trying to roar rather than just shivering so I might go back and edit that little bit.