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    Personal Project WIP: Critiques Appreciated!

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    • Carey Bowden
      Carey Bowden last edited by Carey Bowden

      Hello,

      After Inktober, I've decided to do a small personal project with the bonus goal that I would hang these in a local coffee shop. It's less important for me to sell them than it is to simply finish the project.

      Anyway, I was hoping for some feedback from fellow artists! I really really like constructive criticism, so please tell me what you think doesn't work / looks bad / I need to fix.

      Goal: make 5-10 pieces for Animals Drinking Coffee set by end of the month. Frame originals (about 5"x8" ink and watercolor) and present to local coffee shops, scans can be used for prints/greeting cards.

      The idea: Grown-up version of nursery art. The animals are are supposed to have a cute, plush feel to them, but they're engaged in the "grown-up" activity of drinking coffee. (Or tea / hot chocolate / whatever haha)

      Currently, I'm fiddling with the design.

      Example of a final (quickly colored in photoshop w/ no skill in digital painting, lol)
      0_1510182862874_Screen Shot 2017-11-08 at 5.08.16 PM.png

      For instance, lion could have arms up, or down...
      0_1510182884003_Screen Shot 2017-11-08 at 5.09.13 PM.png

      I'd like to add winter clothing, since it would allow me to add a bit more color and interest, but I think that might "limit" them to a season, (so no one will want them) any thoughts?

      Examples of winter gear vs none: (I know it's hard to see the difference without color)
      0_1510182957410_Screen Shot 2017-11-08 at 5.10.53 PM.png
      0_1510182972767_Screen Shot 2017-11-08 at 5.12.16 PM.png
      0_1510183027612_Screen Shot 2017-11-08 at 5.12.50 PM.png

      Some other designs I'm fiddling with...
      0_1510183846255_Screen Shot 2017-11-08 at 5.29.40 PM.png

      vvv I'm going to re-do these three for sure, but I'm posing them just for the heck of it, haha

      0_1510183691362_Screen Shot 2017-11-08 at 5.27.51 PM.png

      Sorry if the images are really big! I tried to keep them small.

      Well, this was a long post (sorry) but any feedback / suggestions are greatly appreciated! I'll post updates here and probably on twitter as I go along.

      Thank you!

      https://twitter.com/careybowdenart?lang=en
      https://careybowdenart.weebly.com/

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      • Eli
        Eli last edited by

        These are super cute! Two of my favorite things--animals and coffee! I would love to see some different poses or maybe more than one animal in a piece--two animals having coffee at a table, an animal dipping or munching a biscotti, etc. More coffee shop "action poses"--ha! Nice work so far!

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        • rcartwright
          rcartwright last edited by

          I like the ideas and I also think the winter ones are stronger I would say that some of your line work seems to lack confidence in some areas, not sure how you plan to finish them but maybe instead of digital consider watercolor prints or pen and wash. I really like the giraffe and the bear

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          https://www.richardwcartwright.ca/

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          • Carey Bowden
            Carey Bowden @Eli last edited by Carey Bowden

            @eli Thank you! Great suggestion for the "action poses" 🙂

            I wanted to keep them reeaally simple, the idea is "grown-up version of nursery art." (You know... those cute images of animals holding balloons or flowers lol) but with coffee. My first shot did include some tables, so I'll try those again.

            I'm going to do some more sketches and try out your suggestions!

            @rcartwright Thank you!

            Yeah, I agree the winter ones are stronger... I'll keep tweaking the designs. Could you point out specific lines that are not confident? I don't want that! While these are just the pencil sketches/concepts, I want to be sure my art is clear. Then when I go to ink it, I'll be sure to keep your feedback in mind!

            And NOOOO I am NOT finishing these digitally hahaha! I only have a mouse, that would be a disaster. 🙂 Ink and watercolor finals.

            https://twitter.com/careybowdenart?lang=en
            https://careybowdenart.weebly.com/

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            • Carey Bowden
              Carey Bowden last edited by Carey Bowden

              Just wanted to update here that I'm still working on this! And thanks again for feedback!

              My goal is to make 5-10 finished small illustrations that look like nursery art + coffee. I was aiming to finish by the end of November, but I think I'll give myself an extension with all that's going on. 🙂

              Here's a sketch of a more "action shot" as recommended:
              0_1510787141217_Screen Shot 2017-11-15 at 5.02.06 PM.png

              Color practice for the fox. It looks really bright on my computer (I tried to adjust the scan) but the original is a bit less saturated.0_1510787254486_Screen Shot 2017-11-15 at 5.01.51 PM.png I need to change the shape of the scarf, and I will be taking the boots OUT for the final version. 🙂

              And a really quick sketch
              0_1510787357855_Screen Shot 2017-11-15 at 5.04.05 PM.png Gotta fix that left foot!

              Ok, that's the update!

              https://twitter.com/careybowdenart?lang=en
              https://careybowdenart.weebly.com/

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              • Eli
                Eli @Carey Bowden last edited by

                @carey-bowden These look great!! LOVE the action shot and more variety of poses/apparel! These will look awesome all hanging up together!

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                • Carey Bowden
                  Carey Bowden @Eli last edited by

                  @eli Thank you! I'm trying to get all the images designed before I paint the final versions, so hopefully I'll get a breakthrough and make two more in the next couple days

                  https://twitter.com/careybowdenart?lang=en
                  https://careybowdenart.weebly.com/

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