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    • Pamela Fraley
      Pamela Fraley SVS OG @Will Terry last edited by

      @will-terry I would love some feedback on the draw 50 things assignment. I posted it a while ago, but I think it sank to the bottom of the forums before you saw it. That assignment scared the crap out of me. And I had several goes at it before I finally settled on this piece. I work traditionally. This is a combination of ink and watercolor. I know there’s at least one tangent (the plug). But, what I’m wondering is - I messed with perspective a little, but I don’t know if it just makes it look wrong, or if it works. ☺️ Please Fire away! 0_1513887528846_E5BDD81F-EBBE-495B-B689-A34AE769041B.jpeg

      instagram.com/fraleycreates

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      • bdyanne
        bdyanne last edited by

        Thanks Will. 0_1513887973495_fall.jpg

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        • rcartwright
          rcartwright last edited by

          Hi Will,
          This image is from the transportation contest. I couldn't get it to upload so I liked it from my website.

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          https://www.scbwi.org/members/richard-cartwright/
          https://www.instagram.com/richardwcartwright/
          https://www.pinterest.ca/richcartwright3/art-of-richard-cartwright/
          https://www.richardwcartwright.ca/

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          • Eric Castleman
            Eric Castleman @Will Terry last edited by

            @will-terry yes, I have been atruggling with my slowvember piece, and I wanted to ask you about what is wrong with my brain when it comes to keeping consistent values while making a more white image.

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            EricCastleman.com

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            • Laurel Aylesworth
              Laurel Aylesworth last edited by

              Holy heck, I'm jumping at this opportunity. Here's my Slowvember piece I tried to make portfolio-worthy.

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              www.laurelaylesworth.com
              instagram.com/laurelaylesworth

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              • Laurel Aylesworth
                Laurel Aylesworth last edited by

                I'm sneaking in another one.

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                www.laurelaylesworth.com
                instagram.com/laurelaylesworth

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                • Blessings
                  Blessings last edited by

                  Thank you, if you pick this.
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                  • Will Terry
                    Will Terry @Will Terry last edited by

                    @will-terry Looks like I have my work cut out for me! Thank you - I'll get on it! 🙂

                    SVS Instructor
                    http://willterry.com/

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                    • Gary Wilkinson
                      Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                      This was a piece that I worked on in the past week and although I want to consider it to be finished, if there is anything you would recommend to improve upon then I would appreciate the advice. Thanks

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                      www.garywilkinsonart.com
                      www.instagram.com/gwillustration/
                      www.twitter.com/GWillustration

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                      • Will Terry
                        Will Terry @aska last edited by Will Terry

                        @aska Hi Aska,

                        Thank you for sharing this! It's a really fun piece! It's also the nightmare for many illustrators - the dreaded crowd scene! So here's what I would change:

                        1. If you bite it off you have to chew it. So you have to add more detail to the individual animals in each seat. Your characters aren't far enough away to paint as simple color/value shapes. So you need to add more detail to most of these.

                        2. BUT! There's a way to minimize the pain - by overlapping a few patrons in the foreground you can both increase your dynamic design and reduce the work load.

                        3. The main character is separated from the background with black line work while many of the characters are defined by value. You need to pick one or the other for consistency.

                        4. I would vary the animals/shapes of the others to create variety and interest.

                        Again - thank you!

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                        SVS Instructor
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                          gooddharma last edited by

                          Hey glad I saw this! I am very new at SVS - first time looking at the forum. And I am not a student.. I graduated art school back in 1993! But I am trying to break free from the graphic design world and improve my illustration marketability. Would LOVE your feedback. This is not from a book, but it is my latest client work and still geared towards kids. My work is all vectors. 0_1513907794159_LOSS_TRANSPORT_6x18Banner-HalfSize.jpg

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                          • ?
                            A Former User last edited by

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                            This is called Glacier. I was trying a different style focused on more graphic shapes.

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                            • Jonas Zavacky
                              Jonas Zavacky last edited by

                              it is WIP, but I would like to hear some critique at this stage too!
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                              • aska
                                aska @Will Terry last edited by

                                @will-terry Thank you for your comments! I must admit that I got a bit overwhelmed with this piece because of the crowd. It was just too much for my abilities and speed of drawing. So i was secretly hoping that I can get away with it, drawing attention to the elephant, but clearly it didn't work 100% 😉 I will keep your valuable tips and try to rework it in few months. Thanks again 🙂

                                Aska
                                www.mugaska.com
                                https://www.instagram.com/mugaska/
                                https://www.etsy.com/uk/shop/mugaska

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                                • I
                                  IanS last edited by

                                  I've not been doing full illustrations with backgrounds for a while, just characters for the #animalalphabets challenge to keep my eye in. I'm not sure how much of a crit you can give based on a single character but I'd be happy to hear your thoughts! This was F for The Fly. They've gone from cute animals to horror for some reason. I think I'm better at the scarier animals than the cute ones!

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                                    IanS last edited by

                                    @ben-migliore That is lovely!

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                                    • ?
                                      A Former User @IanS last edited by

                                      @ians thank you 😊

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                                      • tombarrettillo
                                        tombarrettillo last edited by tombarrettillo

                                        Here is one I am proud of, but feel it is lacking and could be even better.

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                                        https://www.youtube.com/@tombarrettart

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                                        • Judy Elizabeth Wilson
                                          Judy Elizabeth Wilson SVS OG @Laurel Aylesworth last edited by

                                          @laurel-aylesworth I love this Laurel!

                                          Website http://www.judyelizabethwilson.com/

                                          Instagram https://www.instagram.com/judyelizabethart/

                                          Sharing positivity through art.

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                                          • MissMushy
                                            MissMushy SVS OG last edited by

                                            Trying to figure out composition - still have to redesign moose as well. Any critiques welcome!0_1513956592115_mooseonloose.jpg

                                            www.instagram.com/artbymmartinez
                                            www.instagram.com/the.mindful.otter

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